Question

英语作文句子修改。 求解！！！求解！！！求解！！！

1、我想表达，越来越多来自小学的学生抱怨道，这些不断增加的作业让他们感觉如同活生生的机器。
more and more students from primary school complain the increasing daily homework makes them feel like living machine. 这样有没有问题，有没有更好的该法？
2、人们常常用废寝忘食这个成语描述一个人做某事时忘记吃饭和休息。
People living in China always use an idiom called ”Fei Qin Wang Shi” to describe someone who forgets eating and sleeping when he is doing affair. （能否用when doing something）有没有更好的改法
3、当你集中注意力在一件事上时，你会把其他事情认为次要，并且很难被他们影响。
Focusing on ur favorites, u will think other stuff peripheral and can hardly be disturbed by them. think sth peripheral 这个用法对吗，后面跟and hardly be 。。 这样语法有没有问题？focusing前要不要更加when
4、我猜想，牛顿如果只知道完成作业而不去思考可能只是一个普通工人。
I guess that Newton might be a normal worker if he only know complete his homework each day without thinking. 这句话有没有问题，是否要用虚拟语气，如果有问题，如何修改？
5、学生最好到社会中，通过类似打零工，志愿者等等的实践来提高沟通技能。
Students had better enter in the society to practice the communication skills by doing work such as part-time job, volunteer and so on. 这句话有没有问题，有没有更好的写法？
6、最后一句，Of course, I never deny the function of the well designed homework, which help student impress the content of study, but towards daily homework, I will say “no”. 尤其是towards daily homework，这样写有没有语病，I will say “no” 是否适合书面？
注：这是我写的作文，老师说很多细小的地方有问题，所以才来求助。请注意我每个题目的内容，题目中还有一些小问题，不要笼统的还没有看清题就回答了，要回答就认真点嘛，谢谢！

Answer 1

1、我想表达，越来越多来自小学的学生抱怨道，这些不断增加的作业让他们感觉如同活生生的机器。
More and more students from primary schools（这里要加s,复数） complain that (后面是从句，加个连接词更好)the increasing （去掉daily，原句没这个意思） homework makes them feel like living machines（复数）.

2、人们常常用废寝忘食这个成语描述一个人做某事时忘记吃饭和休息。
People in China always use the(特指，用the比an好。) idiom called ”Fei Qin Wang Shi” to describe someone who forgets to eat and sleep（用to do句型，是忘了去做，而不是忘了做过） when he is doing something. （可以用when doing something，状语从句的省略原则主要是：如果从句中的主语和主句中的主语一致，就可以经过一定的变动把状语从句中的主语和谓语的一部分或全部省略。）

3、当你集中注意力在一件事上时，你会把其他事情认为次要，并且很难被他们影响。
Focusing on your favorites, you will consider other stuffs peripheral and can hardly be disturbed by them. think sth peripheral 这个用法对吗，对的,但用consider更精彩；后面跟and can hardly be,主语也是you，可以省略；focusing前要不要更加when，加不加都可以。

4、我猜想，牛顿如果只知道完成作业而不去思考可能只是一个普通工人。
I guess that Newton might be a normal worker if he only knows to(knows,第三人称单数。 ) complete his homework but without thinking. know后面不能直接加complete.

5、学生最好到社会中，通过类似打零工，志愿者等等的实践来提高沟通技能。
It would be best for students to enter society, and improve their communication skills by doing part-time jobs,being volunteers and so on. 有些地方太罗嗦了

6、最后一句，Of course, I will(加will更顺畅 )never deny the function of the well designed homework, which can help make students(复数)impressed by the contents of study, but to daily homework, I will say “no”. 尤其是towards daily homework，也可以但生硬用to就可以；I will say “no” ,可以啊
sb be impressed by sth： 某物使某人印象深刻

小楼主英语不错，不过细节不够仔细，单复数人称什么的，还有遣词造句上还可以更好。祝进步

又看了一遍，改了些不甚满意的地方……楼主再注意下。恩

Answer 2

1.more and more students from primary school complain that the increasing daily homework makes them feel like living as a machine.
2.People living in China always use an idiom called ”Fei Qin Wang Shi” to describe someone who forgets eating and sleeping when he is doing affairs.
3.Focusing on one favorite, you will think others peripheral and can hardly be disturbed by them.
4.I guess that Newton might be a normal worker if he only knew to complete his homework everyy day without thinking.
5.Students had better enter the society to practice the communication skills by doing work such as part-time job, volunteer and so on.
或：It is the best for the students to enter the society to practice and improve their communication skills by doing work such as part-time job, volunteer and so on.
6.Of course, I never deny the function of the well designed homework, which helps student impress the content of study. But towards daily homework, I will say “no”.

Answer 3

不用改

Answer 4

根本不用改 !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!