求大神指导一下GRE作文Argument部分该如何去写?
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对于已经上过课或者自己复习GRE写作一段时间的同学来讲,大家肯定知道Argument就是要求我们做“杠精”,找出文章中作者重大的逻辑失误。
但是我们刚知道这个,是远远不够的。精准的找到逻辑错误,只是我们万里长征的第一步。
对于想要追求高分的同学来讲,通过我们缜密的分析来搭建完整的逻辑闭环是至关重要的。
现在,我们通过同学们的习作来引导大家不断的完善我们的攻击细节(所有段落都来自同学们全文批改的节选)。
# 节选一 #
To begin with, we should doubt the casual relation between the dramatically increased popularity of skateboarding users and the decrease in stores’ business established by the author. First of all, the stores might have many internal problems. They cannot offer a wider variety of goods and higher quality services to meet the needs of customers. Second, shops in Central Plaza might have fierce competition with nearby stores. Customers may prefer other stores so that the Central plaza might have decreased in business. Therefore, it is unconvincing that the decrease in their business is due to skateboarders.
这位同学的作文,整体结构已经搭建的非常好啦。
但是,在细节处理上,我们可以做的更好。比如这句话:First of all, the stores might have many internal problems. They cannot offer a wider variety of goods and higher quality services to meet the needs of customers.
单看这句话是没什么问题的,但是仔细一分析,会发现:原来Central Plaza是很受欢迎的,只是现在不好了。但是如果只写服务不好,产品多样性不高就会不合理,因为毕竟曾经这家shopping mall很受欢迎,所以它曾经的服务和产品应该是没问题的。因而我们就需要解释为什么商场会越做越差。
所以我们改成了:First of all, the out-of-date internal management could impede stores in Central Plaza from improving their service and products since it was immersed in its past glory time. Therefore, those disappointed customers could choose other nearby shopping malls, instead of Central Plaza.
这样改成之后,我们就可以看出来为什么现在差了呢?因为他们沉迷于以前的成功,不思进取啦。这样我们就把商场现在服务不好这件事情解释清楚了。
这个就叫逻辑闭环。如果大家在考试中可以注意到这样的逻辑闭环,并把它解释清楚,不仅仅会收获更多的字数,也会拿到更高的分数。
# 节选二 #
Moreover, there is a threshold problem involves the content of no Palean boats have been found in the river. The author regards no Palean boats have been found as the same as there were not any boats here before. However, from any aspects, no Palean boats have been discovered in the river and there were totally not any boats here in the past are wholly different. First of all, the row material of boats that Palean used could be wood they cut from tree which could be eroded and vanished as time went by. Besides, it’s likely that there were boats from Litho instead, passing the river and trading goods with Palean. In short, without ruling out those mentioned discrepancies, it is impossible to conclude no found Palean boats is equal to not any boats were once here.
这篇练习来自A166,这道题目本身难度较高,所以是我们直播二里重点讲解的题目。整体来看,这名同学做的很不错,但在细节上还需要进一步打磨。
比如这句:
First of all, the row material of boats that Palean used could be wood they cut from tree which could be eroded and vanished as time went by.
这句可以通过添加更多的细节让我们的论述更加完整。
首先,为什么船只能是木头做的呢?因为当时技术不够先进,没有别的办法。而木头又容易被微生物降解,所以现在就找不到了。
改完这句话就可以写成:
First of all, in the ancient time, people did not have highly developed technology and only used wood to make boats, which was easily decomposed by microorganism. 都是一句话,但是第二句表达更具有细节,解释的更到位。这个就叫逻辑闭环。
不管是Argument,还是Issue,我们都是采用五段式,除去开头段和结尾段,中间三个中心段落是我们得分的核心。
对于Argument来讲,多样的攻击细节和扎实的逻辑解释可以让我们对作者的攻击看起来更加合理,因而可以为我们赢得更多的分数。
在这个过程中,语言水平的高低并不会带来本质的影响(当然我们要尽可能的减少语法错误并保证表意清晰,只是可以不使用相对比较复杂的句子而已)。
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审题.就是在面对作文试题的时候,不忙着下笔,要仔细阅读试题内容,认真分析,弄清楚题目的含义、要求,以及试题所规定的体裁.审题非常重要,关系到文章内容是否符合题意.如果不看请试题的要求,不明白试题的体裁,就动笔而作,那样写出的作文就会出现跑题、偏题的情况.在这样的情况下,无论你的作文写的多么好,也只能是一声叹息,谁也爱莫能助.
立意.审题之后,就该考虑要写什么,要表达什么,在心中有个大概的轮廓,就像我们读到一本书里的内容简介一样.这个思考的过程就是立意的过程,也是确定作文基本内容的过程,在这个过程中就知道了自己要写什么,这样作文的标题就出来了.标题是作文的核心,作文是围绕标题而写的,有了标题立意,写起来就顺手了,就像迷失方向的时候看到指南针一样,朝着那个方向奔跑吧.