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张老师，能否帮我看一下我写的英文中的语法错误？麻烦您了，万分感谢！

Object: To compare the efficacy of three kinds of baits on flies，rotten fish, putrid eggs and brown sugar-vinegar bait In order to select more effective bait for monitoring flies. Methods: Fly trap method is used. Five experimental points were selected and the three kinds of baits simultaneously were used for capturing flies. All the captured flies were identified in laboratory. Results: There is no significant difference in species among the three types of baits. The percentage of captured individuals is rotten fish for 66.98%, putrid eggs for 32.09%, and brown sugar-vinegar for 0.93% .Chrysomya megacephala and Musca domestica are the dominant species in rotten fish bait. Lucilia sericata is more easily attracted by sugar-vinegar bait. Putrid eggs are more attractive to Chrysomya megacephala and Hemipyrellia ligurrien; Calliphoridae and Muscidae are more attracted by rotten fish, Sarcophagidae, Calliporidae and Anthomyiidae prefer rotten eggs. Conclusion: Sugar-vinegar bait can not reflect seasonal changes for its attraction few individuals to each species. Rotten fish attracts too much individuals of a few species, so the importance of some species was hidened. Putrid eggs seem to be a kind of good baits for its relative balance in attraction to species and individuals.

Answer 1

Object: To compare the efficacy of three kinds of baits on flies，rotten fish, putrid eggs and brown sugar-vinegar bait In order to select more effective bait for monitoring flies.

第一个不定式改为：To compare the efficacy of three kinds of baits on …with each other （将三种诱饵的功效进行相互比较）
第二个表示目的的不定式与第一个不对称，最好去掉 In order 改为 and, 与第一个并列：To compare the efficacy … and to select more effective bait

Methods: Fly trap method is used. Five experimental points were selected and the three kinds of baits simultaneously were used for capturing flies. All the captured flies were identified in laboratory.

既然是方法，为什么要用过去时态呢？是否改为：By means of fly trap (使用捕蝇器——方式状语), five experimental points are selected and the three kinds of baits simultaneously are used for capturing flies. All the captured flies are identified in laboratory. (注：如果是实验报告，就不必改为现在时态了，只是把第一句话改了就可以。)

Results: There is no significant difference in species among the three types of baits. The percentage of captured individuals is rotten fish for (for 改为 by，表示达到…的程度) 66.98%, putrid eggs for（同前）32.09%, and brown sugar-vinegar for（同前）0.93% . Chrysomya megacephala and Musca domestica are the dominant species in rotten fish bait. Lucilia sericata is more easily attracted by sugar-vinegar bait. Putrid eggs are more attractive to Chrysomya megacephala and Hemipyrellia ligurrien; Calliphoridae and Muscidae are more attracted by rotten fish, Sarcophagidae, Calliporidae and Anthomyiidae prefer rotten eggs.

Conclusion: Sugar-vinegar bait can not reflect seasonal changes for its attraction (few 前似乎少了介词 to）few individuals to (介词 to 改为 of) each species. Rotten fish attracts too much individuals of (of 改为 to) a few species, so the importance of some species was (过去时态？) hidened (似乎是 hidden 的笔误) . Putrid eggs seem to be a kind of good baits for its relative balance in attraction to species and individuals.

以上两段见括号中标注。

Answer 2

目的:比较功效的三种鱼饵的飞,腐烂的鱼,腐烂的鸡蛋和布朗sugar-vinegar鱼饵为了寻求更有效的引诱监测苍蝇。方法:飞陷阱的方法是使用。五个实验分的选择与三种鱼饵同时被用来捕捉苍蝇。所有被俘的苍蝇被确定在实验室。结果:没有显著差异,而在物种在三种鱼饵。个人捕获的百分比,腐烂的66.98%烂鱼蛋了,布朗sugar-vinegar 32.09%为0.93% .Chrysomya家蝇Musca的大头,优势种鱼饵腐烂。丝光sericata sugar-vinegar更容易吸引鱼饵。腐烂的鸡蛋是更有魅力,Hemipyrellia大头金蝇ligurrien;Calliphoridae和Muscidae更吸引Calliporidae腐烂的鱼,麻,Anthomyiidae喜欢,臭鸡蛋。结论:Sugar-vinegar鱼饵不能反映的季节性变化为吸引一些个体与每一个物种。臭鱼似的吸引了太多的个体,所以有些种类的重要性hidened一些物种被。腐烂的鸡蛋似乎是一种良好的鱼饵由于其宪法上的相对平衡物种数、个体吸引力。