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我是一名2011年高考应届考试，有篇作文请大家帮我看看写的怎么样。
题目：学校附近将建成一家大型化工厂，对此班上有一场讨论会。
38%同学赞成：1.可以促进当地的经济2.可以帮助解决就业问题
62%同学反对：1.将会对学校的教学造成一定的影响2.将会污染周围的环境
150字左右。开头已给出：
A large chemical will be built around our school.Our class had a discussion about this issue.我开始写：Some students support to build a chemical plant,but others don't think it is true.
Students who hold the former view think building a chemical plant can give much benefical effect.It is wonderful to improve the attitude of economic development and solve the problem of employment.
Nevertheless,others consider building a chemical plant will seriously affect school education.Also,they said that the chemical plant will pollute the environment.What's more,they deeply believe the pointview which others hold doesn't hold water.
Considering these suggestions,building a chemical plant isn't accepted by all students.From where i stand,every coin has two sides,we should look at this issue in different parts.As the proverb goes,Every advantage has its disadvantage.It tells us that there is nothing best in the world.Therefore,we should look at things in a positive attitude,
In sum,we should support to build a chemical plant,and also deal well with the problem of pollution.As we do all above,better world we will have.
我的分数是18，满分25.请大家看看应该怎么写更好。谢谢！

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