Question

求评大学四级英语作文，及打分

题目：The Role of Cyber Education
1.电脑和网络技术促进了新的教育形式的产生；
2.网络教育能帮助我们实现终身教育的理念；
3.网络教育的前景；

鄙人不才，奉上拙作一篇
The Role of Cyber Education

whith the rapid development of computer and network technologies,many new forms of education emerge.Traditionally,we learn ABC in a little classroom by giving face-to-face instruction, watching our dear teacher writing on the blackboard with his chalk.But now,we can choose diverse courses through the Internet without going out.
Cyber education can help us fulfill the ambition of lifelong learning.First and foremost,we are able to use our spare time to study thanks to its convenience,which enable us to learn more.Secondly,with various resourses on the Internet,we have many choice,instead of the limited knowledge in the textbook.Last but not least,so flexible as it is,we can learn through the Internet whenever and wherever,studying what is suitable for me.Above the analysis ,it's its convenience,time-saving,flexibility that contribute to lifelong learning.
As Cyber education has so many advantages, more and more people prefer this form.So without any doubts,its prospect is beyond measured.maybe one day,we will bid goodbye to our chalks and blackboard but carry our computers to school.

求改正，求点评还能怎样写得更好，谢谢~~~！
打的时候可能有部分单词出错，纯属输入问题

Answer 1

whith the rapid development of computer and network technologies,there are many new forms of education emerge.Traditionally,we learn ABC face-to-face in a small classroom , and watch our dear teacher writing on the blackboard with his chalk.But now,we can choose diverse courses through the Internet without going out.
Cyber education can help us fulfill the ambition of lifelong learning.First and foremost,we are able to spend our spare time studying because of its convenience,and it enable us to learn more.Secondly,with various of resourses on the Internet,we have many choices,instead of the limited knowledge in the textbook.Last but not least,so flexible as it is,we can learn through the Internet whenever and wherever,studying what is suitable for me.Above the analysis ,it's convenience,time-saving,flexibility that contribute to lifelong learning.
As Cyber education has so many advantages, more and more people prefer this form.So there is no doubt that its prospect is beyond measured.Maybe one day,we will say goodbye to our chalks and blackboard but carry our computers to school.

Answer 2

还不错，15分可得12左右.