Question

请各位高手帮忙看一下。马上就要面试了。中英文的自我介绍。看看有什么地方需要修改和添加的。谢谢啊

各位评委老师下午好：我的名字叫做XXX。20岁。身高180公分。体重75公斤。喜欢看书和音乐。我来自于四川广元。现就读于电子科技大学成都学院。空乘及地面服务专业。于大学1年学习中。先后取得了英语3级和普通话2级甲等证书。积极参加学校组织的各种活动。乐于助人。凡是需要帮忙的同学和老师。我都会用自己最大的能力去帮助他们。很荣幸参加这此面试。希望贵公司能给我这次机会。我将会用我的行动证明我自己。

Good afternoon teachers judge you: My name is XXX. 20 years old. Height 180 cm. Weight 75 kg. Like reading and music. I come from Guangyuan, Sichuan. Now studying at the University of Electronic Science and Technology, Chengdu Institute. Flight attendants and ground service professional. 1 year study at the university. Has achieved level 3 in English and Putonghua two A-level certificate. Actively participated in various activities organized by the school. Helpful. Those who need help the students and teachers. I will use my best abilities to help them. Am honored to participate in this in this interview. Hope you can give me this opportunity. I will use my actions to prove myself.

Answer 1

筒子，你是面试啥东西？如果是公司的话，你说的太嫩了，没说到点上。
中文自我介绍，你得改改，问候是要的，不过面试的怎么是评委老师呢，你直接问候大家好了就行了，然后简单的自我介绍：
大家好，我叫xx，男，（说性别的时候，可以加下一点动作，比较特别的点，也能引起大家对你的兴趣）今年20岁，来自美丽的四川广元，是电子科技大学成都学院的空乘及地面服务专业大一的学生。在校期间，除了在学业上先后取得了英语3级和普通话2级甲等证书，在也课余时间也积极参加校内外的一些活动（如果有组织过活动就说下，没有就简单的说下你都参加了什么活动），从而提高了我的团队协作能力，沟通能力和学习能力。个人性格外向，做事沉着冷静，有条理，乐于助人，关心他人。今天我来到这里，希望给自己一个体验的机会，我也相信自己能做好自己要做的事情，（如果是应聘什么职位的，那就加一句，我也相信凭我目前掌握的技能，高度的责任感和良好的学习能力，适应能力，完全能胜任这工作），谢谢。
男孩子就该大气点，有自信点。
英语自我介绍嘛，其实大概就听下你的口音而已，内容嘛不会太注重的，我给你个样板你模仿下：
Good afternoon, my name is XX.
It is really a great honor to be here.
I hope I can make a good
performance today.
Now I will introduce myself briefly.

I am 20 years old. I was born in Sichuan Guangyuan,
I am freshman of Chengdu University of Electronic Science and Technology Institute,my major is xxx.
I have passed English III and Putonghua. and i have acquired basic knowledge of my major during my school time.
I am an outgoing and hardworking guy.I am open-minded ,quick in thought .I have lots of interest such as playing basektall,badminton.
so,If you give me the great chance,I won't let you disappoint.Ok,
that's all.
Thank you.
I hope that you will be satisfied with me,
thank you again.
记得介绍要熟记，英语方面的话，说的不好没关系，内容上没几个人会听的，主要是口音上，要多练练，说的比较正的话，对你来说是过关的关键，最好模仿下美音怎么说的。
good luck.

Answer 2

还可以，不过不明白Good afternoon teachers judge you是什么意思。是不是要改下？

Answer 3

再把语句理理 不太通顺啊