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请各位英语高手帮我修改下语法,句子的结构,标点符号那些的...还有如果觉得有哪些写的不够好的可以提一下建

Despite most people agree that protecting animals is essential, there are still some antagonists who against protecting endangered animals think that animal extinction is just an evolutionary process which humans are not necessary to care too much about, and it is just like what the Darwin’s principle said of “survival of the fittest” that the extinction of animal must be inevitable. Raup says in his paper that “the extinction of species is closely tied to the process of natural selection and is thus a major component of progressive evolution… Darwin seems to have seen extinction as part of selection; in others, as an inevitable outcome” (1). However, this idea of normalization of extinction is absolutely wrong. Those people see extinction as a natural phenomenon, but it is controversial to the humans’ attitude about the nature. Humans always try to survive, and we never want the world we live by to be destroyed; the earth is the home that we rely for existence. Assume that all animals are extinct, with the consequence, eventually, the sufferer will be human themselves. However, what Raup implies is that the nature all species which depend on does not matter if it is ruined. Furthermore, the truth that Raup didn’t realize is that populations of animal species have been dwindling at an unprecedented and alarming rate. Based on records of extinction among the best- studied types of animals, ecologist Stuart Pimm and colleagues calculated extinction rates during the past century, it shows “Scientists can expect from 1 to 10 species to go extinct each year from all forms of life, visible and microscopic. In fact, species are exiting much faster. That rate is between 100 and 1000 times faster than the background rate of species extinction.” It shows that the species are going extinct at a faster rate than at any time in the past. This rate is too much higher than the normal rate of extinction; it is unnatural. Once the ecosystem collapses, it is very hard to recover again. It is also like a domino game, after all the dominos fall down, it takes much time to get it back to the original status because the effect is far serious than human think. So the real natural thing humans need to do is to keep our ecosystem stable by saving animals.
也可以帮我改一下句型

Answer 1

Despite the fact that most people agree that protecting animals is essential, there are still some antagonists who are against protecting endangered animals .They think that animal extinction is just an evolutionary process which is not necessary for humans to care too much about, and it is just as what the Darwin’s principle says :“survival of the fittest”.The extinction of animals must be inevitable. Raup says in his paper that “the extinction of species is closely tied to the process of natural selection and is thus a major component of progressive evolution… Darwin seems to have seen extinction as part of selection; in others, as an inevitable outcome” (1). However, this idea of normalization of extinction is absolutely wrong. Those people see extinction as a natural phenomenon, but it is controversial to the humans’ attitudetowards nature. Humans always try to survive, and we never want the world we live by to be destroyed; the earth is the home that we rely on for existence. Assume that all animals are extinct, with the consequence, eventually, the sufferer will be human beings themselves. However, what Raup implies is that it doesn't matter if the nature all species depend on is ruined. Furthermore, the truth that Raup didn’t realize is that the population of animal species has been dwindling at an unprecedented and alarming rate. Based on records of extinction among the best- studied types of animals, ecologist Stuart Pimm and colleagues calculated extinction rates during the past century, it shows “Scientists can expect from 1 to 10 species to go extinct each year from all forms of life, visible and microscopic. In fact, species are exiting much faster. That rate is between 100 and 1000 times faster than the background rate of species extinction.” It shows that the species are going extinct at a faster rate than at any time in the past. This rate is too much higher than the normal rate of extinction; it is unnatural. Once the ecosystem collapses, it is very hard to recover again. It is also like a domino game, after all the dominos fall down, it takes much time to get it back to the original status because the effect is far serious than human think. So the real natural thing humans need to do is to keep our ecosystem stable by saving animals.

Answer 2

Despite most people agree that protecting animals is essential, there are still some antagonists who are against protecting endangered animals; they think that animal extinction is just an evolutionary process which humans are not necessarily need to care too much about. This process is just like what the Darwin’s principle said:“survival of the fittest.” The extinction of animals must be inevitable. Raup says in his paper that “the extinction of species is closely tied to the process of natural selection and is thus a major component of progressive evolution… Darwin seems to have seen extinction as part of selection; in others, as an inevitable outcome” (1). However, this idea of normalization of extinction is wrong. Those people see extinction as a natural phenomenon, but it is controversial to the humans’ attitude towards the nature. Humans always try to survive, and we never want the world we live in to be destroyed; the earth is the home that we rely on for existence. Assume that all animals are extinct, with the consequence, eventually, the sufferer will be human themselves. However, what Raup implies is that the nature which all species depend on does not matter if it is ruined. Furthermore, the truth Raup didn’t realize is that populations of animal species have been dwindling at an unprecedented and alarming rate. Based on records of extinction among the best- studied types of animals, ecologist Stuart Pimm and colleagues calculated extinction rates during the past century, it shows “Scientists can expect from 1 to 10 species to go extinct each year from all forms of life, visible and microscopic. In fact, species are exiting much faster. That rate is between 100 and 1000 times faster than the background rate of species extinction.” It shows that the species are going extinct at a faster rate than at any time in the past. This rate is way higher than the normal rate of extinction; it is unnatural. Once the ecosystem collapses, it is difficult to recover again. It is also like a domino game, after all the dominos fall down, it takes much time to get it back to the original state because the effect is far more serious than humans think. So the real natural thing humans need to do is to keep our ecosystem stable by saving animals.

That 用的太多了，可以适当用分号，短句子。。。
试着用不同的句型，也不错。