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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.

Answer:

The two charts illustrate that the outcome of a questionnaire of adult education.The first bar chart describes the causes why adults decide to study, while the pie chart outlines how people shared the costs of each course.

As can be seen from the bar chart, most adults decide to study are attributed tointerest in subject (40%) and to gain qualification (38%). Then the percentage of the other three reasons, helpful for current job, to improve prospects o fpromotion and enjoy learning or studying, is nearly half as high as previous two main reasons, constituting 22%, 20% and 20% of total adults respectively. Next, adults who want to change jobs and to meet people account for the least two proportion, making up 12% and 9% of total numbers.

Accordingto the pie chart, individual should afford the largest cost of adult education,reaching 40% of entire cost for each course. 35% of cost should be covered byemployer whereas the last 25% of cost is supposed to pay for by taxpayer.

To sum up, individual should pay more when they attend adult education. And majority adults would learn because of interest in a certain subject or to gain qualifications.
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