Question

我在申请留学，中介叫我写一篇个人称述 personal statem。我从未接触过这个，求范文。下面我会补充说明。

这是原题：请写一篇自我描述即personal statement，尽可能的反映自己真实的一面，可以是任何你想说的话题，通过你所谈论的话题，学校能够更全面的了解你。（尽量用英文写，如有困难就用中文）

希望前辈帮帮我。急用

Answer 1

首先，总的来说，我觉得既然中介机构作为你申请的全权代理，你就要提出合理的要求。

其次，PS是作为申请材料中最重要的一个文书环节，对你的申请起到很重要的影响。既然交了费用，那么中介机构作为有经验有能力的服务提供商，就应该把他们的经验和能力拿出来为你的申请做服务，而不是让一个对PS没有概念，没有经验的你去处理这些。这样无论对你还是对他们的申请结果都是不负责任的态度。

再次，不过话说回来，如果他们敢让你自己去处理PS（甚至可能包括其他文书），这个可能是因为你选择的学校对于文书的要求并不高。那么这就不是简单的文书问题而是选择学校的问题了。所以，你自己要对学校的选择做出更加谨慎的判断。

复次，话再说回来。任何一家机构或者中介都没办法凭空捏造你的文书。也就是说，你可以根据一定的格式来写出一些你的个人材料，然后让中介机构来根据你的背景来写出材料。（材料包括PS,ESSAY,CV,RL等等）这些文书材料不可能让你自己去完成的。

好了，就说这么多，应该可以帮到你，有问题可以给我留言，祝你好运

Answer 2

http://www.nuigalway.ie/careers/students/faq/statement.html
This statement is a chance to show you have the commitment and qualifications to work or pursue further study in your chosen field. It is a personal statement, not an academic assignment or a CV. Personal pronouns are acceptable. Starting every sentence with “I” is not advisable, of course and you may feel self-conscious. However, do not be too modest!

You need to provide evidence that you have relevant requirements in an interesting, authentic, succinct, structured and personal way.

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What are the steps to writing a good statement?

The first step is to be clear on what is required.
The Postgraduate Admissions Office in NUI Galway, for example states that “unless indicated otherwise, all applicants to taught programmes only (i.e., this is not applicable to research applicants) must enclose a typed personal statement of approximately 600 words explaining why you wish to undertake the programme(s) of your choice, outlining how it fits into your career objectives”.

Other courses may have information included with the application asking you to provide specific information in the personal statement or evidence of experience. Read the application pack carefully and make sure you address all the areas mentioned. E.g., if a college asks for strengths and weaknesses then be sure to write about both and not concentrate only on the strengths.

The second step is to brainstorm and research your self-assessment, based on questions such as:

•Why did you choose the programme / job?
•What are your past successes?
•What are your core values and interests?
•What got you to this point in your life? (Events, people, …)
•What is distinctive about me? List at least five key attributes
•What learning influences have shaped me? Give credit to people, books etc.
•What special courses, modules or skills would make me more successful in this programme or job?
•What challenges have I overcome in my academic, work or personal life recently?
•What are my career goals? This is specifically mentioned in the NUI Galway application process and the Career Development Center would be delighted to assist you set your career goals.
You can see key aspects of the related job(s) on Prospects to get a list of relevant competencies (in the entry requirements section).

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Layout

Plan the structure of the personal statement and divide it into ’chunks’. You will need an introduction and conclusion of course. There is no blueprint for the perfect personal statement – however you might consider focusing sections on:

Sections of a typical personal statement include:

1.Why you are applying to this course / college.
2.Your academic qualifications and how they relate to the course.
3.Your personal qualitites, work experience and acheivements that make you suitable for the course.
4.Conclusion
It is particularly important to back up statements with evidence. If you say you enjoyed a particular module, for example, clarify the aspects you enjoyed; if you refer to particular experiences then say what you achieved and learned; if referring to interests and experiences outside college then outline the extent of your involvement.

Brainstorm the answers initially, get help and feedback from a wide variety of sources and write it all down.

Write your introduction last. Do not begin with “My name is…” Every sentence is now important, edit out anything that appears boring or irrelevant.

You seldom see your own ’typos’. Print out a draft and have at least two other people proofread it to ensure there are no spelling or grammatical errors. A good test is to read it aloud and see if it slows the reader’s progress – make it easy to read.

Answer 3

中介都不帮着写ps...? 难道光帮忙寄信吗？

Answer 4

其实是这样的。ps不是每个学校都有要求。因为每个学校essay题目不一样。
内容不可能全是写你这个人的所有方面，而是几个能够突出的。
中介怕麻烦，所以就叫你把所有有关你的信息整理，然后交给他们统筹下。

自己好好构思吧。把真实的反映出来，缺点亦可（我有篇就是提到几个缺点）
我diy的。思考几天就出来了