Question

帮我检查下我写的英文有没有语法问题。

谢谢噢~

My major is industrial design. After three months of study. I more and more like this major. Because what the industrial designers do is to improve People's lives and to help people in need. This is what I want to do. Although I am far from Fujian, but life is also full of joy. I have 5 very good roommates! They are friendly, lovely girl. We went to class together, eat together, learn together, and play together. Life is full of sun. How lucky I am! Now I want to do is get good grades in my studies. Efforts to achieve the target and my dream.

Answer 1

1. I more and more like this major 最好改成 I like this major more and more.
2. People's lives 应该用单数，life表示生活时是不可数的
3. Although I am far from Fujian, but life is also full of joy.去掉but或者although，这两个词不能同时出现，用although或者though的时候表示转折可以用yet或者不用。
4.They are friendly, lovely girl. girl用复数girls
5. We went to class together, eat together, learn together, and play together. 这句也不算是错误，但是很累赘，可以写成 We went to class, eat , learn and play together.
6. Life is full of sun. 我理解你的意思应该是想说生活充满阳光吧~~所以把sun改成sunshine比较好。
7. Now I want to do is get good grades in my studies. 应该是一个主语从句，要在I 前面加一个引导词what。而且get这个动词原形不能作表语，要么用getting，要么用to get
8. target 应该是和 reach搭配用的，achieve可以和dream一起用，但是和target不太合适。

就是这样啦~~别看我列出这么多，其实总体来说也没什么特别大的问题
希望LZ能明白这些细节

Answer 2

I more and more like this major.这句典型的中式英语。应该改成I like this major more and more.
后面那个improve people's life (lives).rommate 最好用Nice 来修饰，比good好。Life is full of sunshine.生活充满阳光。Now one thing I want to do is to get ...
Do efforts to ....

Answer 3

My major is industrial design. I become fond of this major over years. What the industrial designers do is to improve people's lives and to help people in need and This is what I aim to. Although I am far from Fujian, my hometown, life is also full of joy. I have 5 very good roommates! They are friendly, lovely and gentle. We go to classes together, eat together, learn together, and hang out together. Life is filled with sunshine. How lucky I am! Now what I want to do is to get good grades in my subjects. Endeavor to achieve the target and realize my dream!

我帮你整理了下，你看看哈

Answer 4

My major is industrial design. After three months of study. I like this major more and more ,because what the industrial designers do is to improve people's lives and to help those in need. This is what I want to do. Although I am far from Fujian, my life is also full of joy. I have 5 very good roommates! They are friendly, lovely girls. We went to classes together, have meals together, learn together, and play together. Life is bright here. How lucky I am! Now what I want to do is to get good grades in my studies and try to achieve the target and my dream