Question

请高手帮忙看一下我的这封回信有没有什么问题，语法上的，或是单词拼写上的，或是用词不当的地方。谢谢

Thank you for your letter. If I can become a member of WCC I will feel very honoured. I have finished most of the application materials. I will pay for the application and homestay application fees as soon as possible .

Thank you very much.

Yours Sincerely,

Fanny
再加上一句尽快寄出申请材料“and send the application materials as soon as possible”这句加在哪里比较合适？

Answer 1

Thank you for your letter.
I will feel quite honoured if I can be a member of WCC. In addition, the most of the application materials have been finished. And the application and homestay application fees will be paid recently , and I will send the application materials as soon as possible.
Thank you very much.
Yours Sincerely,

Fanny
p.s. 不要每句话都是 i will 开头，很单调

Answer 2

Thank you for your letter.It will be my great honor If I can be accpeted by WCC . At present, I have finished most of the application .The application will be sent out and the relevant application and homestay application fees will be paid as soon as possible .

Thank you very much.

Yours Sincerely,

Fanny