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急求英语大神出现,帮我修改一下我写的高考英语作文!谢谢英语达人!

帮我修改一下我写的高考英语作文!再评价一下我写的作文的不足!同时告诉我几句在这篇文章中如何写才能得高分的句子,一共三问!
题目:
假定你是李华，从互联网上得知一个国际中学生组织将在新加坡举办夏令营，欢迎各国学生参加。请写一封电子邮件申请参加。
内容主要包括：
1、自我介绍（包括英语能力）；
2、参加意图（介绍中国、了解其他国家）；
3、希望获准。
注意：
1、词数100左右
2、可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯
3、邮件开头和结尾已为你写好。
我写的作文:
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a Chinese student named LiHua.When I surfed the Internet last night,I kowned that your organisation would hold a Summer Camping in the Singapore.I want to join in this activity to introduce more about China for you and make more foreign friends to master other countries' culture.My English Grade is great and often visit English country by representing our school.
I will apply for a chance which can admit me joining you,this is informations about me .I am waiting for your reply.
Regards,
LiHua
主要是帮我修改一下作文,谢谢!有哪些语法错误\单词错误,该怎样改呢?谢谢!

Answer 1

1your organisation would-----you were going to
2more about China for you and make more foreign friends to master other countries' culture---Chinese culture to national friendes ,as well as to know more about other countries .
3-My English Grade is pretty good and i used to be the representor of our school to visit English country .