Question

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When you go to a university from a senior middle school, you will find that you have very more free time. What would you do use the time? To take a part-time job? To read some useful book? Or, to take exercise your body?
Someone consider that we should take a part-time job. Beacause, a part-time job can give us some knowledge which can’t study from shool, and apart-time job can give me some experience in society, we can easily go to work after university career end.
Others consider that we shouldn’t take a part-time job wastes our time, as a student, we must take attention to hard study. If we take a part-time job, we will don’t have more time to study and we lost more than get.
I consider that we should take a part-time job, but, we don’t pay our all time for this job, we must use more time to hard study.
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Answer 1

After you enter a university from a senior middle school, you will find that you have more free time. How would you do use that extra time? Get a part-time job? Read some useful books? Or take up some form of exercise to ensure healthy living?
Many consider taking up part-time jobs because a part-time job is thought to be able to provide one with knowledge that cannot be gained from school. Also, part-time jobs can provide work experience, making it easier for one to enter society after completing his tertiary education.

However, there are others who feel that part-time jobs are a waste of time and that a student's main focus should ultimately be studying. These people believe that having a part-time job would result in less time for studying and thus have disastrous effects.
I personally believe that it is alright to have a part-time job as long as we are able to strike a balance between working and studying.

Answer 2

Because,a part-time job can give us some knowledge which can’t study from shool.(school)

Answer 3

都没有英语作文啊