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帮我纠正下语法错误~~

如果我能活在在世界上任何地方,我会选择芬兰。芬兰位于欧洲北部，首都为赫尔辛基。地势北高南低，内陆水域面积占全国面积的10%，有岛屿约17.9万个，湖泊约18.8万个，有“千湖之国” 与“千湖之国”之称。冬季的平均气温-14℃-3℃，夏季13℃- 17℃，气候非常宜人。在教育方面，芬兰2003年的教育预算为57.86亿欧元，占政府预算的15.7%。著名高等学校有赫尔辛基大学、赫尔辛基技术大学、坦佩雷大学等。而我会选择芬兰作为我退休后较长时间的落脚点。最后, 如果我能活在在世界上任何地方,我就选择芬兰。谢谢。
If I could live anywhere in the world I would choose Finland. Finland is located in northern Europe, capital for Helsinki. Topography north high low in the south, inland waters area accounts for 10% of the national area, there are about 17.9 million islands, the lakes 18.8 million, about "of thousands of lakes kingdom" and "kingdom of thousands of lakes" said. Winter temperatures average - 14 ℃ - 3 ℃, summer 13-17 ℃ ℃, it's very pleasant. In education, Finland 2003 education budget for 57.86 billion euros, accounting for government budget 15.7%. Famous higher schools have the university of Helsinki, Helsinki technology university, TanPeiLei university etc. And I will choose Finland as I retire after a long time the foothold.Finally, if I could live anywhere in the world, I'd choose Finland. Thanks.

Answer 1

主要是读起来别扭 有点太遵从汉语意思逐字逐句了 其实有些是固定用法 不是按汉语字面来的 下面是根据我的理解写的 给你当个参考
If I can live in any place I want in the world, I will choose Finland.（虚拟语气 主句现在时从句要用将来时） Finland, whose capital is Helsinki（定语从句要用引导词）, is located in the northern part of Europe. Lying north to south，the inland waters area accounts for 10% of the whole nation.(这里主谓宾已经齐全了 应该是句号）There are about 179 thousand(million是百万）islands and 188 thousand lakes throughout the country , which gives Finland the title of "the kingdom of thousands islands" and "the kingdom of thousands lakes".The average temperature in winter is -14℃-3℃, while 13℃-17℃ in summer , so the climate is very pleasant. As to the education, the budget for education reached 5.786 billion(注意billion是十亿）, making up 15.7% of the total government budget.(尽量避免总是用一样的词）There are several famous universities, such as Helsinki University, Helsinki University of Technology, TanPeiLei University(专有名词首字母大写）and so on。（要用etc.一定要加那个点 所以算上后面的句号应该是两个点）As for me, I will choose Finland as my long-term foothold after my retirement.(长期不是long time 是long-term记得连字符）Once again, If I can live in any place I want in the world, I will choose Finland.Thank you.
我大概总结了一下发现问题很集中 首先是句子很不规范 有些句子里居然一个动词都没有 您至少得主谓宾齐全吧 其次是句子结构混乱 乱用从句还不加引导词 最后就是对所选用单词的用法不了解 建议加强基础

Answer 2

If I could live anywhere in the world, I would choose Finland. Finland is located in northern Europe, and the capital is Helsinki. Finland lies north to south. The inland water area of this country accounts for 10%, with about 179,000 islands and about 188,000 lakes. Finland is called the country of "thousand lakes" and the "thousand lakes". In winter, the average temperature is between -14 ℃ and 3 ℃, while in summer, it’s between 13 ℃ and 17 ℃. The climate is very pleasant. As for education, the national budget in 2003 was 5.786 billion euros, accounting for 15.7% of the government budget. The universities there are the University of Helsinki, Helsinki University of Technology, Tampere University and so on. And I will choose Finland as a long-time living place after I retired. In a word, if I could live anywhere in the world, I'd choose Finland. Thank you.

帮你重新翻译了一下，原来直译的地方太多，很生硬，希望能对你有所帮助！~