Question

帮忙改错，谢谢

on the left of the dormitory is our canteen which is the Phoenix studio on the third floor。

Answer 1

on the left of the dormitory is our canteen which is the Phoenix studio on the third floor.
on the left of the dormitory is our canteen【 above】which is the Phoenix studio on the third floor。
关系代词which 前面加 above，这是而个倒装句，都是全部倒装。

Answer 2

第一段：
1.第一句末用逗号，第二句应用there be以避免汉语式英语；
Accordingly,there should be rules when I am at home.
2.第三四句受中式影响不地道，第三句末去掉to us,下列可供参考：
The previous rules seem so strict and unresonable that it should be revised.
第二段：
1.第一句末去掉to me are as follows.
2.第二句的because后面的is去掉：或者改为because it enables me to be energetic.
3.第三句语法错误，谓语不定，第三个部分加上because,另外healthys是形容词，名词形式是heallth.
，because it is bad for my health.
更好一点的表达,because it is harmful to my health.
4.第四句没有特定指出帮哪个人，所以others前不加the，such as后面用and
5.第五句和第三句一样的语法错误，谓语不定，逗号后面改成which can relief there burden作定语.

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