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In recent years,The Global shortage of Fresh Water has aroused people's concern.
Someone think that fresh water resources are inexhaustible.
The reason why these people hold such a view is that there is fresh water in many places of our life.
For example:lake water ,rain water and groundwater . That all is the fresh water.
This is a myth. The rain water will seep into the ground and into the groundwater .All the lake water and all the groundwater will into the sea.
Then water evoporaters through the sea and forms cumulonimbus clouds over land.
It's a water cycle and that doesn't mean we have an inexhaustible supply of fresh water.
The wide spread problem now is the pollution of fresh water resources.
And most people waste fresh water resources.
If you have a statistic in your hand ,you will find that there is very little fresh water relative.
So I suggest you stop wasting water and protect it from being polluted.

Answer 1

在最后劝人节约用水之前。你可以再加一些实际案例，例如XX污染，还有很多偏远山区的人喝水困难。

Answer 2

in recent years中应写为in recent year
will into the sea改为will go into the sea
find that there is very little fresh water relative改为 find that there is very little the fresh water resources

Answer 3

In recent years,The Global shortage of Fresh Water has aroused people's concern.
Someone thinks that fresh water resources are inexhaustible.
The reason why these people hold such a view is that there is plenty of fresh water in many places of our life.
For example:lake water ,rain water and groundwater . All of them are fresh water.
This is a myth. The rain water will seep into the ground and into the groundwater .All the lake water and all the groundwater will flow into the sea.
Then water evoporaters through the sea and forms cumulonimbus clouds over land.
It's a water cycle and that doesn't mean we have an inexhaustible supply of fresh water.
Now, the wide spread problem is the pollution of fresh water resources.
And most people waste fresh water resources.
If you have a statistic in your hand ,you will find that there is very little fresh water available.
So I suggest you stop wasting water and stop it from being polluted.

Answer 4

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Answer 5

In recent years, the global shortage of fresh water has aroused people's concern. Someone thought that fresh water resources were inexhaustible. The reason that people hold such a view is that fresh water almost appears everywhere in our living. Such as water in rivers, in lakes, underground, dropping from rain and melting from glaciers etc. All of these nature phenomenon send us an illusion that the fresh water is inexhaustible. But the truth is there is only 2.5% fresh water on the earth while the rest is salt water in the sea. So comparing with sea water, the proportion of fresh water which human can drink is too low.
Although sea water and fresh water are inner recycling process, i.e sea water can transform to fresh water, this shall need very long time and huge cost. Someone may ask why not transform polluted water into fresh water ? People will also face the same problem of huge cost in transforming industrial water into fresh water.
Therefore ,the tough problem now we need to solve is the pollution and waste of fresh water. Saving water is equal to saving living cost. We can’t imagine what human life like without fresh water. Maybe like a camel living on desert, but unfortunately, human doesn't have the same survival capability with camels.
Here I appeal to those guys who ignore pollution and waste of fresh water to start to save it and protect our living environment.