Question

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The drawing vividly demonstrates that a man lying on the ground is dreaming up various opportunities.A few words below the cartoon says,”why are chances passing by ?”
The cartoon intends to express the meaning as follows.To begin with ,a majority of people tend to wait for opportunities with no efforts.In addition ,as the old saying goes ,no pain, no gain.It must be admitted that one with no efforts couldn’t be successful.Therefore,we should make preparations for our future so that we may not miss opportunities.
As for me ,it is ridiculous to wait for chance with no preparation .Only when we are equipped with ability to realize it may we be winner.

Answer 1

不知道你的年纪如何
语言有些平淡，比如说我感到很无聊，太直白了，可以改成每年过节方式的前篇一律不免令我有些心生厌倦，
开头第一段就是好几个短句子。就是说 一句话长一点，有个逗号，适当添加连接词，不然会给人短促，前后无关联的感觉。

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Answer 2

The cartoon picture portrays a man lying on the ground and dreaming of catching various opportunities vividly. A title under the picture asks "......" This picture intends to tell people that opportunities reward the prepared. People who are waiting for chances without preparation can never catch the opportunities. Therefore， be prepared before the opportunities come. .....(Own opinion)