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帮我修改英语作文 谢谢

Dear parents,thank you for your self-giving love
As the time went,I grow up gently and leavr my hometown for making a living, so the opporunity to contact with both of them is less and less.But I always believe thay my parents will love me forever.
When I was young,my home is expecially poor.So my father have to stay on a stange land for earning bread to ours family.And my mather raise our theer brothers to maturity self.
When I was in the hige school,my parents workded more hard and endeavor in order to get more money afford me to study.although they usually have to get up early to work and late off work.,they never have any complain.only hope that I can have a good achievemnt.
Then I went to the senior hige school in where I have to depart from my hometwon to study,it is mean my parents must to pay more monney for my school work.
Three years late,I went to the college in the city of foshan,it is all know that the tuition is so dear that a great number of people cann’t pay for it in china.But I never forgot the words,hard to learn tuition is not a problem, my parents tell me when I wound be off my family to the college.
At present,I have graduted from the medical college,and to be a doctor.Involuntarily,I am longing for giving them the money each month,however,my gage is too low to send any few of money back home.Essentially, I ought to go back home for the compotation in the spring festival,at last,that days I will be on duty.my dear parents I hope both of yours willl be health everyday. Your son.

Answer 1

Dear parents, thank you for your self-giving love. (既然不是写给你父母的信这句话就没有必要了，或者改为I want to thank my parents for their self-giving love.) As the (the 去掉)time went,I grow（grew,过去式） up gently and leavr（left, leave的过去式） my hometown for making a living, so the opporunity to contact with(with去掉，contact是及物动词) both of them is less and less.But I always believe thay my parents will love me forever.
When I was young,my home is expecially（你是想用especially吧，不过这个词太中国话了，就改为very, 如果是非常的穷就用extremely） poor.So my father have(had, has的过去式) to stay on a stange（strange） land for earning bread to ours family.(此处用一个不定式短语好一些，to earn bread for our family) And my mather(mother) raise our theer brothers to maturity self(妈妈把我们三个兄弟拉扯大，可以改为 We three brothers were brought up by our poor mother).
When I was in the(the 去掉) hige school,my parents workded more hard（hard的比较级是harder, 不是more hard） and endeavor in order to get more money afford me to study..(这一句都改一下吧：When I was in high school（根据你的上下文此处应该是junior high school）, my parents worked even harder in order to get the money for my tuition and fee. ）although（Although） they usually have(had) to get up early to work and late off work, they never have(had) any complain(complaint 名词).only hope（Their only hope is） that I can have a good achievemnt(in the future.)
Then I went to the (the 去掉)senior hige school in(去掉 in ) where I have(had) to depart from my hometwon to study,it is mean(It means或者It is meant that) my parents must to(to 去掉) pay more monney（money） for my school work.
Three years late(later),I went to the college in the city of foshan(Foshan),it is all know(known) that the tuition is so dear that a great number of people cann’t pay for it in china.(Chinese college students can't afford for it)But I never forgot the words,hard to learn tuition is not a problem, my parents tell me when I wound be off my family to the college.(这一句想表达什么父母告诉我只管学习，不用考虑学费？)
At present, I have graduted from the medical college,and to be a doctor.（and I am a doctor now）Involuntarily,I am longing for giving them the money each month,however,my gage(wage) is too low to send any few of (few of 去掉)money back home.Essentially（Principally）, I ought to go back home for the compotation in the spring festival,at last,that days(during Spring Festival) (but) I will be on duty, (so I can't go back home this year).my dear parents I hope both of yours willl be health everyday. (I feel so sorry for my dear parents and I can only sincerely hope that they are healthy each day.)
Your son. God, 问题还不少，看在你的孝心的份上帮你修改了，看你也没几个财富值了，友情帮忙了，你的经历让我想起了我的过去 共同加油吧 未来会更好的 是吧

Answer 2

Dear parents,thank you for your self-giving love
As the time went by,I grow up gently and leave my hometown for making a living, so the opporunity to contact with both of them is less and less.But I always believe that my parents will love me forever.
When I was young,my family was expecially poor.So my father had to stay on a stange land for earning bread to our family.And my mother raised our three brothers to maturity self.
When I was in the high school,my parents worked more hard and endeavor in order to get more money afford me to study.although they usually had to get up early to work and late off work.,they never had any complain.only hope that I can have a good achievemnt.
Then I went to the senior high school in which I had to depart from my hometwon to study,it was mean my parents must to pay more money for my school work.
Three years late,I went to the college in the city of foshan,it is all know that the tuition is so dear that a great number of people cann’t pay for it in china.But I never forgot the words,hard to learn tuition is not a problem, my parents tell me when I wound be off my family to the college.
At present,I have graduted from the medical college,and to be a doctor.Involuntarily,I am longing for giving them the money each month,however,my gage is too low to send any few of money back home.Essentially, I ought to go back home for the compotation in the spring festival,at last,that days I will be on duty.my dear parents I hope both of you willl be health everyday. Your son.
ok改完了,你时态好多用错了,有些单词也拼错了

Answer 3

Dear parents,thank you for your SELFLESS love
As the time GOES BY ,I grow up GRADUALLY and HAVE TO leavE my hometown for making a living, so the opporunity to contact both of them is GETTING less and less.But I always believe thay my parents will love me forever.
When I was young,my home WAS EXCEPTIONALLY poor.So my father haD to stay on a stRange land for earning bread FOR OUR family.And my mather raiseD our THREE brothers to maturity BY HERself.
When I was in the hige school,my parents workded hardER in order to get more money TO SUPPORT MY study.although they usually haD to get up early to work and late off work.,they never haD any complainTS.only hopING that I COULD have a good achievemEnt.
Then I went to the senior hige school in wher
e I haD to depart from my hometwon to study,it meanT my parents HAD TO pay more monney for my school work.
Three years lateR,I went to the college in the city of Foshan,it WAS all knowN that the tuition WAS so dear that a great number of people COULDN'T pay for it in china.But I never forgot the words,hard to learn tuition WAS not a problem, my parents TOLD me when I wound be off my family to the college.
At present,I have graduted from the medical college,and to be a doctor.Involuntarily,I am longing for giving them the money each month,however,my AGE is too low to send any money back home.Essentially, I ought to go back home for the compotation in the spring festival,at last,that days I will be on duty.my dear parents I hope both of YOU willl be healthY everyday. Your son.