Question

帮我看一下这篇作文语法哪里有错误还有哪些地方可以修改一下的，谢谢啦~

My classmate WangLi,whose work was published on the school net,won the first prize in our school"s calligraphy competition.Some students hold the opinions that learnig calligraphy is extrordinary important for it can develop our Chinese traditional cultures.In recent years,many traditional things have been lose sight of,especially by adolescent.Others,who have the opposite ideas that as the paperless offices become more and more popular,we spent little time in writing.So,it's not neccessary to pratise calligraphy.

原文：
1.事件：你班同学王立在校书法比赛中得了第一名，他的作品被发布在你校的校园网上:
2.同学们对练习书法持不同观点：
（1）一些同学认为书法很重要，有利于发展中国的传统文化；近年来许多传统事物都被人们忽略了，尤其是青少年。
（2）其他同学认为现在随着无纸办公的普及，很少用到书写，所以没有必要练习书法。
要求：只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。

Answer 1

My classmate WangLi,whose works（work改为works，作品是works不是work） was published on the school net,won the first prize in our school"s calligraphy competition.Some students hold the opinions that learnig calligraphy is extraordinarily（extrordinary拼写错误，应是extraordinarily，副词才对） important， for it can develop our Chinese traditional cultures.In recent years,many traditional things have been lost （lose改为lost，被动语态） sight of,especially by adolescent.Others,who have the opposite ideas that as the paperless offices become more and more popular,we spend（spent改为一般现在时spend,与前面as从句的become时态相一致） little time in paper-（writing分为有纸书写和无纸书写，加上paper-，以与无纸书写区分）writing.So,it's not neccessary to pratise calligraphy.

修改后整理的全文如下：
My classmate WangLi,whose works was published on the school net,won the first prize in our school"s calligraphy competition.Some students hold the opinions that learnig calligraphy is extraordinarily important， for it can develop our Chinese traditional cultures.In recent years,many traditional things have been lost sight of,especially by adolescent.Others,who have the opposite ideas that as the paperless offices become more and more popular,we spend little time in paper-writing.So,it's not neccessary to pratise calligraphy

Answer 2

经鉴定，这篇文章写得VERY GOOD。

Answer 3

这已经很好了。

Answer 4

My classmate WangLi,whose work was published on the school net, won the (--删掉这个) first prize in our school"s calligraphy competition. Some students hold the opinions (opinion) that learnig (learning) calligraphy is extrordinary (extraordinarily) important(,) for it can develop our (traditional) Chinese traditional (--删掉这个) culture. In recent years, many traditional things have been lose sight of,especially by adolescent. (从traditional 开始, people, especially young people, have lost sight of aspects of traditional culture.) Others, who have the opposite ideas that as the paperless offices become more and more popular, (从who 开始,believe that the art of writing calligraphy is actually not even necessary anymore, as the idea of the paperless office becomes more and more popular.)

改成这个样子, 希望帮到你 ..

Answer 5

My classmate WangLi,whose works was published on the school net,won the first prize in our school's calligraphy competition.Some students hold the opinions that learnig calligraphy is extraordinarily important， for it can develop our Chinese traditional cultures.In recent years,many traditional things have been lost sight of,especially by adolescent.Others,who have the opposite ideas that as the paperless offices become more and more popular,we spend little time in paper-writing.So,it's not neccessary to pratise calligraphy .

Answer 6

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