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My Hometown
My hometown is LiLing. It is in the southwest Hunan. It’s a beautiful town ,the people is very friendly and funny.
In LiLing , the weather is always warm, so is a good place to go hiking , people in LiLing like to go to the Xishan Park , there is ZuoQuan general’s museum, he is very famous .In spring, kids like to fly the kites , so you can see a lot of kites fly in the sky. The food like LiLing duck is very delicious . LiLing also productions china more than 2000 years of history. The color of china is wonderful.
I love my hometown very much. Do you like it? Welcome to LILing. If you go to here , you will have a good time. 展开
My hometown is LiLing. It is in the southwest Hunan. It’s a beautiful town ,the people is very friendly and funny.
In LiLing , the weather is always warm, so is a good place to go hiking , people in LiLing like to go to the Xishan Park , there is ZuoQuan general’s museum, he is very famous .In spring, kids like to fly the kites , so you can see a lot of kites fly in the sky. The food like LiLing duck is very delicious . LiLing also productions china more than 2000 years of history. The color of china is wonderful.
I love my hometown very much. Do you like it? Welcome to LILing. If you go to here , you will have a good time. 展开
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My Hometown
My hometown is LiLing. It is In the southwest of hunan.(你的意思是湖南的西南部吧) It’s a beautiful town ,people in there (个人感觉用the people不太好)are(复数) very friendly and funny.
In LiLing , the weather is always warm, so is a good place to go hiking .(句号好一些哈)People in LiLing like to go to (不特指,不能用the)Xishan Park .There is a general’s museumn of ZuoQuan who is very famous .(加个从句调整一下顺序)The food, which is named LiLing duck, is very delicious . (这句提前,感觉会好一些,又改了一下,应该会比较好)In spring, kids like to fly (不特指啊) kites , so you can see a lot of kites fly(这里也可以用flying,fly为习惯性,flying为……) in the sky. LiLing is also Chinese history of more than 2000 years results.(如果你这句的意思是,LiLing是中国两千多年历史的成果,那就照这个写,如果不是,那就恕我无能为力了,实在看不懂)(The color of china is wonderful,这句建议不要写,逻辑都混乱了)
I love my hometown very much. Do you like it? Welcome to LILing. If you go there(here是副词,不能加to,建议用there,当然there也是副词) , you will have a good time.
My hometown is LiLing. It is In the southwest of hunan.(你的意思是湖南的西南部吧) It’s a beautiful town ,people in there (个人感觉用the people不太好)are(复数) very friendly and funny.
In LiLing , the weather is always warm, so is a good place to go hiking .(句号好一些哈)People in LiLing like to go to (不特指,不能用the)Xishan Park .There is a general’s museumn of ZuoQuan who is very famous .(加个从句调整一下顺序)The food, which is named LiLing duck, is very delicious . (这句提前,感觉会好一些,又改了一下,应该会比较好)In spring, kids like to fly (不特指啊) kites , so you can see a lot of kites fly(这里也可以用flying,fly为习惯性,flying为……) in the sky. LiLing is also Chinese history of more than 2000 years results.(如果你这句的意思是,LiLing是中国两千多年历史的成果,那就照这个写,如果不是,那就恕我无能为力了,实在看不懂)(The color of china is wonderful,这句建议不要写,逻辑都混乱了)
I love my hometown very much. Do you like it? Welcome to LILing. If you go there(here是副词,不能加to,建议用there,当然there也是副词) , you will have a good time.
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My hometown is LiLing. It is in the southwest of Hunan. It’s a beautiful town ,and the people are very friendly and funny.
In LiLing , the weather is always warm, therefore, it is a good place to go hiking . People in LiLing would like to go to the Xishan Park .There is a general’s museumn of ZuoQuan who is very famous .In spring, kids like to fly the kites , so you can see a lot of kites flying in the sky. The food, which is named LiLing duck, is very delicious . (LiLing also productions china more than 2000 years of history. The color of china is wonderful.)这句话你大概想表达什么意思?
I love my hometown very much. What about you? Welcome to LILing. If you go here , you will have a good time.May you be happy.
其余的大概就这么给你改吧,你是初中的吧?
In LiLing , the weather is always warm, therefore, it is a good place to go hiking . People in LiLing would like to go to the Xishan Park .There is a general’s museumn of ZuoQuan who is very famous .In spring, kids like to fly the kites , so you can see a lot of kites flying in the sky. The food, which is named LiLing duck, is very delicious . (LiLing also productions china more than 2000 years of history. The color of china is wonderful.)这句话你大概想表达什么意思?
I love my hometown very much. What about you? Welcome to LILing. If you go here , you will have a good time.May you be happy.
其余的大概就这么给你改吧,你是初中的吧?
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恩,我是初三的。醴陵生产陶瓷超过两千年的历史了
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The history of china in LiLing is more than 2000 years, and the color of china is not a little wonderful.
not a little 是“非常”的意思,可以代替more
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southwest 后加of 顺口一点, It’s a beautiful town ,the people is very friendly and funny. 改为 The people who live in this beautiful town are nice and friendly.
so is a good place to go hiking 改为so it's a good place for hiking .然后要大写《People个p字》------>The people who living there like to go to the Xishan Park, since there are ZuoQuan general's museum《这个地名不知道有没有错。。》,it;s so famose!
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is改为was《The food like LiLing duck is very delicious》后面2句不明白你要表达什么《LiLing also productions china more than 2000 years of history. The color of china is wonderful》
If you go to here ,here改为there,删除to。
so is a good place to go hiking 改为so it's a good place for hiking .然后要大写《People个p字》------>The people who living there like to go to the Xishan Park, since there are ZuoQuan general's museum《这个地名不知道有没有错。。》,it;s so famose!
Spring要加s
is改为was《The food like LiLing duck is very delicious》后面2句不明白你要表达什么《LiLing also productions china more than 2000 years of history. The color of china is wonderful》
If you go to here ,here改为there,删除to。
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醴陵生产陶瓷超过两千年的历史了
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It also product ceramics for more than 2000 years already!
The colour of China is wonderful是指中国色彩强烈?如果是的就可以说成:This chinese traditional place was wonderful in my heart.
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