Question

麻烦老师帮我修改下英语作文谢啦！

翻译作业：当前大学生的就业率使我们意识到进行合理思考的重要性，每年有大约300万大学生从学校毕业，寻找工作，他们中的很多人并没有找到一份适合自己的工作，有一个原因是没有足够的就业机会提供给数量如此庞大的毕业生。但除此而外，过高的自我估计也是可能的原因之一。
我的翻译：employment rate of college graduates at present makes us being aware of the importance of reasonable thinking .every year about 3 million students graduated from school look for work , most of whom do not find a suitable job . there's a reason that they are not enough employment opportunities available to such a large number of graduates . moreover , excessive self- assessment is one of the possible reasons .
麻烦老师您帮我看看有语法错误没？

Answer 1

个人观点如下：

(The) employment rate of college graduates at present makes us (去掉being) aware of the importance of reasonable thinking. Every year about 3 million students (graduated改成graduate) from school (look改成looking) for work, most of whom (do改成can) not find a suitable job. (There is a reason 改成One reason is) that (they改成there) are not enough employment opportunities available to such a large number of graduates. Moreover, excessive self- assessment is one of the possible reasons.

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