Question

麻烦帮忙改错，感谢

Answer 1

第一段：
1.第一句末用逗号，第二句应用there be以避免汉语式英语；
Accordingly,there should be rules when I am at home.
2.第三四句受中式影响不地道，第三句末去掉to us,下列可供参考：
The previous rules seem so strict and unresonable that it should be revised.
第二段：
1.第一句末去掉to me are as follows.
2.第二句的because后面的is去掉：或者改为because it enables me to be energetic.
3.第三句语法错误，谓语不定，第三个部分加上because,另外healthys是形容词，名词形式是heallth.
，because it is bad for my health.
更好一点的表达,because it is harmful to my health.
4.第四句没有特定指出帮哪个人，所以others前不加the，such as后面用and

5.第五句和第三句一样的语法错误，谓语不定，逗号后面改成which can relief there burden作定语.

Answer 2

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