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急！ 我写了一篇英文文章，那位大师能帮我修改一下！ 万分感谢！

我自己写的，里面难免又很多的语法错误和使用得不地道的地方，请您帮我修改一下好吗？谢谢！

This is a story about risk. Is has attracted me a lot. Ahab ,the hero of the story, one of his legs was eaten by Moby Dick ,a ferocious white whale。He has changed from now on, and he believes that Moby Dick is the representative of all the evil and miseries in the world. He vowed to kill it to revenge. In order to achieve his goal, Ahab didn’t regardless of the warning given by the nature and the different ideas said by sailors. This white whale is very strong, as an ordinary person, we have less hope to defeat it. But he still challenged it even though it was destined for fail. At last, Ahab and Moby Dick perished together.
Herman Melville is good at using symbols to write story and depict the characters. In this book, there are many symbols which are hard to understand and it is the important reason of the success of the story. First, let’s talk about Moby Dick. It is the enemy of Ahab. He often swims in the sea and shows his strong power, so people are afraid of him. Many people were eaten by him and harpoons can’t harm him. He swims leisurely in the sea even through there are many harpoons on his body. It is the symbol of all the evils in the world. Moby Dick is also the symbol of nature. If we continue to live by plunder the nature, we will be killed by it. Second, what’s the symbol of Captain Ahab? He and the white whale are opposites. In order to revenge, he doesn’t regardless of the life of sailors and the profit of the owner of the ship, so almost sailors died.
Ahab has become a fiend. He is more evil than the while. On the other hand, he is a man who dares to resist customs. There is s conflict between Ahab and whale for 40 years, but he will never be defeat. In a word, there are not only one symbol of Ahab, like Moby Dick, the symbols of him are multiple and incompatible. Kind and evil are all on him.
The constructions of Moby Dick depend on how to define this white whale. If Moby Dick is the symbol of evil, Ahab will be a symbol of human beings, because he dares to challenge evil and he doesn’t submit to destiny. We should learn his spirit of brave. However, if Moby Dick is the symbol of nature, Ahab will represent the dark of capitalism. He chases whale means people seize nature. Almost sailors died means nature revenge human beings. People can never conquer nature.
From this book I have learnt a lot. First, everyone is a contradictory individual. We should accept both their advantages and disadvantages.
Second, we should build an environment friendly society. Don’t seize nature. All the living beings are our friends. Third, if you have a dream, please try to achieve it and never give it up.
This is a book that young and old can read and appreciate. This is also a meaningful book. If you have spare time, I hope that you can read it.

Answer 1

This is a story about risk. 【It】 has attracted me a lot. Ahab ,the hero of the story, one of his legs was eaten by Moby Dick ,a ferocious white whale.He has changed from 【then】 on, and he believes that Moby Dick is the representative of all the 【evils】 and miseries in the world. He 【vows】 to kill it to revenge. In order to achieve his goal, Ahab 【takes action(这里regardless是副词】 regardless of the warning given by the nature and the different ideas said by 【the】sailors. This white whale is very strong【.】 【As】 an ordinary person, we have 【little(这里没有比较）】 hope to defeat it. But he still 【challenges】 it even though it 【is】 destined for 【failure(fail是动词，这里要用名词）】. At last, Ahab and Moby Dick 【perish】 together.
Herman Melville is good at using symbols to write 【stories]】and depict the characters. In this book, there are many symbols which are hard to understand and it is 【an】important reason of the success of the story. First, let’s talk about Moby Dick. It is the enemy of Ahab. He often swims in the sea and shows his strong power, so people are afraid of 【it】. Many people were eaten by him and harpoons can’t harm him. He swims leisurely in the sea even [though] there are many harpoons on his body. It is the symbol of all the evils in the world. Moby Dick is also the symbol of nature. If we continue to live by [plundering] the nature, we will be killed by it. Second, what’s the symbol of Captain Ahab? He and the white whale are opposites. In order to revenge, he [neglects] the life of 【the】 sailors and the profit of the owner of the ship, so almost 【all】 sailors died.
Ahab has become a fiend. He is more evil than the 【whale】. On the other hand, he is a man who dares to resist customs. There is a conflict between Ahab and whale for 40 years, but he will never be 【defeated】. In a word, there 【is(there be 句型遵循就近一致原则，位于取决于靠近的名词】 not only one symbol of Ahab, like Moby Dick. 【The】symbols of him are multiple and incompatible. Kind and evil are【both(两者用both）】 on him.
The constructions of Moby Dick depend on how to define this white whale. If Moby Dick is the symbol of evil, Ahab will be a symbol of human beings, because he dares to challenge evil and he doesn’t submit to destiny. We should learn his spirit of【bravery（这里应该用名词)】. However, if Moby Dick is the symbol of nature, Ahab will represent the dark of capitalism. 【He chases whale这句话问题大了，前半段是一个完整的句子，无法作主语，改为That he chases whale或者是His chasing whale，不知道你是几年级的，以后学到主语从句就知道了，后半部分一样的道理】 means【people’s seizing】 nature.【That almost all】 sailors died means 【nature's revenging】 human beings. People can never conquer nature.
From this book I have learnt a lot. First, everyone is a contradictory individual. We should accept both 【our】 advantages and disadvantages.
Second, we should build an 【environmental】 friendly society. Don’t seize nature. All the living beings are our friends. Third, if you have a dream, please try to achieve it and never give it up.
This is a book that young and old can read and appreciate. This is also a meaningful book. If you have spare time, I hope that you can read it.

比较频繁的问题就是时态了，你用的时态比较混乱，需要记住的问题是，复述一篇文章时，一半都用一般现在时，但是主要还是先看原著的时态。大致就这样了。 我们现在学习英国文学，再古老的作品，我们复述时都依照原著的一般现在时而采用一般现在时，所以，这是个规定吧。看还有什么问题可以百度HI我，晚自习下课我有时间。

Answer 2

This is a story about risk. 【It】 has attracted me a lot. Ahab ,the hero of the story, one of his legs was eaten by Moby Dick ,a ferocious white whale.He has changed from 【then】 on, and he believes that Moby Dick is the representative of all the 【evils】 and miseries in the world. He 【vows】 to kill it to revenge. In order to achieve his goal, Ahab 【takes action(这里regardless是副词】 regardless of the warning given by the nature and the different ideas said by 【the】sailors. This white whale is very strong【.】 【As】 an ordinary person, we have 【little(这里没有比较）】 hope to defeat it. But he still 【challenges】 it even though it 【is】 destined for 【failure(fail是动词，这里要用名词）】. At last, Ahab and Moby Dick 【perish】 together.
Herman Melville is good at using symbols to write 【stories]】and depict the characters. In this book, there are many symbols which are hard to understand and it is 【an】important reason of the success of the story. First, let’s talk about Moby Dick. It is the enemy of Ahab. He often swims in the sea and shows his strong power, so people are afraid of 【it】. Many people were eaten by him and harpoons can’t harm him. He swims leisurely in the sea even [though] there are many harpoons on his body. It is the symbol of all the evils in the world. Moby Dick is also the symbol of nature. If we continue to live by [plundering] the nature, we will be killed by it. Second, what’s the symbol of Captain Ahab? He and the white whale are opposites. In order to revenge, he [neglects] the life of 【the】 sailors and the profit of the owner of the ship, so almost 【all】 sailors died.
Ahab has become a fiend. He is more evil than the 【whale】. On the other hand, he is a man who dares to resist customs. There is a conflict between Ahab and whale for 40 years, but he will never be 【defeated】. In a word, there 【is(there be 句型遵循就近一致原则，位于取决于靠近的名词】 not only one symbol of Ahab, like Moby Dick. 【The】symbols of him are multiple and incompatible. Kind and evil are【both(两者用both）】 on him.
The constructions of Moby Dick depend on how to define this white whale. If Moby Dick is the symbol of evil, Ahab will be a symbol of human beings, because he dares to challenge evil and he doesn’t submit to destiny. We should learn his spirit of【bravery（这里应该用名词)】. However, if Moby Dick is the symbol of nature, Ahab will represent the dark of capitalism. 【He chases whale这句话问题大了，前半段是一个完整的句子，无法作主语，改为That he chases whale或者是His chasing whale，不知道你是几年级的，以后学到主语从句就知道了，后半部分一样的道理】 means【people’s seizing】 nature.【That almost all】 sailors died means 【nature's revenging】 human beings. People can never conquer nature.
From this book I have learnt a lot. First, everyone is a contradictory individual. We should accept both 【our】 advantages and disadvantages.
Second, we should build an 【environmental】 friendly society. Don’t seize nature. All the living beings are our friends. Third, if you have a dream, please try to achieve it and never give it up.
This is a book that young and old can read and appreciate. This is also a meaningful book. If you have spare time, I hope that you can read it.

Answer 3

Is has attracted me a lot。。。。
同意楼上的。

Answer 4

你还是把中文贴上来吧，你的英语实在不敢恭维，而且一看就不是你写 的，肯定是机器翻译的，我读了半天读懂了大概的意思，但是我真的猜不出来你想说什么啊~~抓狂了