Question

请高手帮忙看看这有没有语法错误！谢谢了！ 如果有更好的改正请指出，会加分的！

Hi！My name is .... After a little self introduction, let me talk about my idea. I think there is a very important thing about this job——we should let foreign students to know about Chinese culture. I think we can teach a little Chinese to them, because language is the soul in a country. Not only this，An assistant should have excellent organizing ['ɔ:ɡənaiz] ability [ə'biliti] and highly responsibility. If I can get this job, I’ll seriously organize the activities in class and positive completion the task.
I believe they’ll have a good impression about China.

Answer 1

Hi！My name is .... After a （short 或 brief） self-introduction, let me talk about my idea. I think there is a very important thing about (用to更好一些) this job——we should let foreign students to know about Chinese culture. I think we can teach a little Chinese to them, because language is the soul in a（用one更好一些） country. Not only （about）this，(an 小写) assistant should have excellent organizing ['ɔ:ɡənaiz] ability [ə'biliti] and highly(用higher) responsibility. If I can get this job, I’ll seriously (用 carefully 更好一些) organize the activities in (用during) (the) class (time) and ( positive不用） completion（用complete ） the (my) tasks.
I believe they’ll have a good impression about China.
整体而言，中国式英语特点太突出。比较典型的完全按照汉语意思组织英语词汇。语义尚可，意境不够。

追问

我给你发了站内信 麻烦看看还有什么需要改进的地方！急用 追加10分 谢谢了！

追答

Hi！My name is Zhang Xueqian. After a short self-introduction, let me talk about my idea（用opinion更好一些）. An assistant should have excellent organizing ['ɔ:ɡənaiz] ability [ə'biliti] and higher （加上sense of）responsibility. If I can get this job, I’ll （用I would）carefully organize the activities during the class time and complete my task （用tasks）.
Not only about this. I think there is a very important thing to this job——we should let foreign students to know about Chinese culture. I think we can teach a little (用some 好一些) Chinese to them, because language is the soul in one country.
I believe they’ll have good memory （仍然用impressions 好一些）of China.

Answer 2

1, let foreign students know
2, teach them some Chinese
3, a soul of a country
4, positively complete the task
5, have good memories about China