Question

这篇英语作文也请帮忙修改下，谢谢！

题目：请以Modern Industry为题，写一篇不少于150字的短文，要求包括下列个点：
1、现代工业改变了我们的生活
2、现代工业污染了我们的环境
3、现代工业带来的问题可以通过综合治理方法解决

Modern Industry
With the development of society,people's living mode has been changed tremendously.It is due to modern industry to some extent.Products of modern industry bring us a much more convenient daily life.More means of transport,more daily uses,more tools and more entertainments are provided to us,and can be chosen by us arbitrarily.
But every coin has two sides.Modern industry not only bring us a more convenient lift but also pollution of environment.In modern society,many factories pay much more attention to money and don't care the issue of pollution.Many animals died from pollution.And now,human being is threaten seriously by the issue.
I think that we must make a comprehensive regulation to solve the issue of pollution.People and company in the world must contribute their share.When we throw some products,we have to make out if they can't be recycled indeed.The productors of modern industry must reduce pollution to the greatest possible extent.After all,it is profitable to us in the long run.

麻烦您帮忙看一下，出了单词和语法方面，结构例子什么的这样写好吗？像这种有提纲的作文题目，我每段的第一句要严格翻译提纲给的句子，还是可以像现在这样写？
谢谢咯！

Answer 1

Modern Industry
With the development of society, to some extent, people's living standard has been improved tremendously due to modern industry. Commodities of modern industry bring us a much more convenient daily life than ever before. More kinds of transportation, daily uses, tools and entertaining activities are offered and can be chosen by us according to our own desires.

But every coin has two sides. Modern industry not only makes our life much more convenient but also brings about environmental pollution. In modern society, many factories only cares about manufacturing budget while paying little attention to the issues of pollution. Many animals have been sicked or died from pollution, also we human beings are threatened deeply by this kind of issues.

I think that we must set up a comprehensive regulation to solve the issues of pollution. People and companies all around the world must strive to do their best to save the only planet we live on. When we discard some wastes, we should make them out if they can't be recycled completely. The managers of those modern industries must work out practical ideas so as to cut pollution to the lowest degree because it's the only way that benefits human beings in the long run.

你好，你的作文我改好了，写这种小作文可以适当地用一两句话写论据来支持论点。有提纲的作文，第一句最好不要偏离提纲给的句子的意思，不一定一个个字对应，意思到即可。原文里有点细节上的小问题要关注一下。希望以上的帮助对你有用。

Answer 2

It is due to modern industry to some extent 改为 Due to modern industry to some extent

Answer 3

还不错
Modern Industry
With the development of society, to some extent, people's living standard has been improved tremendously due to modern industry. Commodities of modern industry bring us a much more convenient daily life than ever before. More kinds of transportation, daily uses, tools and entertaining activities are offered and can be chosen by us according to our own desires.

But every coin has two sides. Modern industry not only makes our life much more convenient but also brings about environmental pollution. In modern society, many factories only cares about manufacturing budget while paying little attention to the issues of pollution. Many animals have been sicked or died from pollution, also we human beings are threatened deeply by this kind of issues.

I think that we must set up a comprehensive regulation to solve the issues of pollution. People and companies all around the world must strive to do their best to save the only planet we live on. When we discard some wastes, we should make them out if they can't be recycled completely. The managers of those modern industries must work out practical ideas so as to cut pollution to the lowest degree because it's the only way that benefits human beings in the long run.
如果改成这样会更好
！！