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Dear Lisa
I am glad to get your letter.Welcome to Beijing.May I invite you to have a trip of Beijing?Now,I want to introduce my plan of our Beijing trip.
Do you know the Great Wall?It is one of the most famous building.We will climb the Great wall for a whole day.Because it is too long that we will be careful,too.I remember I have said “climb the Great Wall can make us healthy and we can breath the fresh air on it”。Anyway,I like climbing it a lot! We will go there together,will not we?
In fact, Beijing is big city.It has a population of 13 million people.So we will go to many different places,such as Wangfujing Street , Hongqiao Pearl Market and so on.Will you want to go shopping with me?There is a big supermarket near my home.If you do not want to go there.I think it is a very old street.It has more than one hundred years old.Will you like eating Tanghulu?A kind of Beijing snack.I like it a lot.Because it is very sweet.
In the evening,we will go to listen to Peking Opera at the National Theatre.I think we all will not like it.All of young children don not like it.But I think it is very important to be a Chinese to listen to the opera.
I believe we will have lots of fun together.
I am looking forward to meeting you.
Yours,
Zhang Ling

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Dear Lisa
I am glad to get your letter.
I am writing to you to formally invite you to have a trip to Beijing? For the details,I will introduce my plan of the trip as following.
The first, do you know the Great wall? It's one of the most famous sightseeing place in China. We will climb the Great wall for a whole day.Because it is qutie tall so that we also should pay much attention on it. I remember that I have said “Climbing the Great Wall can make us healthy; and we can breath the fresh air”。Anyway,I like climbing quite much! We will go there together,will not we?
The second, Beijing is a big city has a population of 13 million people. So, it has many different places we can go, such as Wangfujing Street , Hongqiao Pearl Market and so on. In that case, will you want to go shopping with me? There is also a big supermarket near to my home. If you do not want to go there, we have another option of a very old street. It is more than one hundred years old. Moreover, Will you like to take a Tanghulu, a kind of Beijing snack, I like it a lot because it is very sweet.
At last, in the evening,we will go to listen to Peking Opera at the National Theatre.I think we all will not like it. Becasue all of young children don' like it. But I think it is very important to be a Chinese to listen to the opera.
I believe we will have lots of fun together.
I am looking forward to meeting you.
Yours,
Zhang Ling
写念迟凯给朋友的信件，一般是非正式文体。 你基本用词准确，书信交代的文体也比较清楚。
但是前后文仔唤关联旦悉不是很好。
注意用连词，介词，代词来联系上下文。
Climbing the Great Wall can make us healthy; and we can breath the fresh air。这句特别说一下， 动名词或者不定式引导的句子才能做主语， 动词原形不能。 然后前后两句因为主语不同，最好并列，用分号。