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复试英语面试的短文 英语高手帮忙修改一下啊 答得好还有加分哦~！！
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2.考研原因 (reasons for my choice)
There are several reasons. ,
First I like the Chinese medicine profession . Chinese medicine is an important part of Traditional Chinese culture. It has a long history.
Second,my father is a Doctor of Chinese medicine. Under the influence of his, I want to learn more about this profession.and to be a good doctor .
Thirdly, I think further study is still urgent for me to realize self-value. Life is precious. It is necessary to seize any chance for self-development, especially in this competitive modern world.

In a word, I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after two years study here.

3.研究生期间你的计划 (plans in the postgraduate study)
If I had the chance to study in this university. I will try my best to learn the school curriculum.in the spare time,I will read a lot of books about chinese medicine . Take good advantage of internship opportunities . If possible, I will go on with my study for doctorate degree.
4 .介绍你的家乡(about hometown)
I am from 秦皇岛 , a famous tourist city. Located in the northeast of Hebei Province, the first national coastal open cities.it is also The only city named after a emperor. For now, it is a famous port city in northern China. 2008 Beijing Olympic Games ‘ co-host city. Qinhuangdao, known as the "back garden of Beijing and Tianjin"reputation. With the Great Wall, coastal, eco-tourism resources such as good. There is my beloved hometown.
5.你的家庭(about family)
There are five members in my family; my parents, my brother ,my sister and me. My father is a doctor. He oftenworks late. So most of the housework is done by my industrious mom. My sister works in Personnel department
in 西安。My brother is In the Russian school. We rarely together.So I miss them a lot. During my prepareing for coming here,my parents’ support have always been my power.and I hope I wil be able to repay them in the future.
6.你的大学(about university)
Hebei University of Engineering is built by central and local governments, on a local-based colleges and universities of Hebei Province. The school has a bachelor's, master level personnel training system. At present there are 13 colleges and two teaching departments. Academic Degrees Committee of the State Council in 2000 approved a master's degree can apply to carry out equivalent staff units. In 2003 the Ministry of Education has recommended approval of the exemption for the outstanding graduate Undergraduates units. 2005, approved by the State Council Academic Degrees Committee of Master of Engineering Graduate units. With honors in 2007 by the Ministry of Education undergraduate teaching level evaluation.

Answer 1

1. First I like the Chinese medicine profession .
Second,my father is a Doctor of C
>change to : Firstly,.........Secondly,....

2. Under the influence of his,
> c t: influence by him

3. If I had the chance to study in this university.
> CT: if i have the chance.....

4. I am from 秦皇岛 , a famous tourist city. Located in the northeast of Hebei Province, the first national coastal open cities.

>CT: my hometown is QinHuangDao, it is a national coastal opening city which located in the northeast of Hebei Province.

5. For now
>CT: at present

6. there are five members in my family; my parents, my brother ,my sister and me.
>ct: there are five members in my family: my parents, brother, sister and me.

7. So most of the housework is done by my industrious mom. My sister works in Personnel department

>ct: so , most of the houseworks are done by nanny. My sister works in a Personal Department.

I found lots of grammar and the word class problems in your assignment. I suggest you had better to check up more carefully. other wise, I found that you seems to use Chinese to translate directly, this is not accepted in English assignment. Anyway, I think you really do a good job, at lease not too many student can write such a long essay. keep going.

Answer 2

我还是个初一的学生，看不懂那么多....

Answer 3

First ---To start with
Second -----Secondly 以后的都加LY
influence of his----his great influence
to be a good doctor----后加个like my father
making a solid foundation for ---laying a solid foundation of
I will read a lot of books about chinese medicine . Take good advantage of internship opportunities 这是一句话 中加and take...
Located in the northeast of Hebei Province, the first national coastal open cities不是一完整句子 在the first 前 加my hometown is
自己写的 加点分？