Question

英文演讲稿修改

My dreams
Hi,I’m Joy.
Do you know Martin Luther King?He had a quite famous speech called”I Have A Dream”.Yes,he had a great dream,and it has come true.Everyone has lots of dreams.I have lots of dreams as well.Some may come true,but others are only dreams.
Have you ever heard Harry Potter?It’s a very famous story.I’ve been mad on that novel for several years.I was attached to the world which is filled with magic and strange things in the story when I read the book in my first time.I always want to have my own wand and broomstick,and…I want to live in the world!However,it’s only a wonderful dream.
In the real world,I want to be a doctor.When I was very young,some doctor saved my grandfather’s life.I want to be a doctor since then.As I grew older,my interests in the medicine grew.Now,I think doctor is one of the most sacred job in the world,and I want to join them one day.
Oh,and I want to travel around the world in the future.I want to visit all of the beautiful or lod place in the world!It will bring me enjoyment,relaxtion and lots of new knowledge. And when I was free,I want to be a guide.
I have lots of other dreams.Maybe some will never come true,but in my heart, they always be true.
两分钟以内。

Answer 1

1attached to the world (lost in the world)
2I want to live in the world!(I want to live in the world which is full of spells!)
3Oh,and I want to travel around the world in the future(估计这个OH 演讲不好说，你斟酌一下）
4It will bring me enjoyment（建议ENJOYMENT换掉如joy,rejoice,ecstacy)
两分钟的演讲的话，你找个录音的工具自己调整速度和语气吧，字数好像多了一点点，你可以说我想会魔法又会医术的话，可以调侃一下，自己是巫医，应该是幽默元素吧，如But if i really become a doctor with a magic band in my pocket,i would be banned as a voodoo(witch doctor).DOTA里不有个巫医么，别人听到BAN了巫医就笑了。

Answer 2

To provide clients with understandable prose and to make technical jargon readable to the non-technical reader
最好有个老外润色.
一定成功!