Question

中文翻译成英文的问题

本文以家族企业内部控制的现状为起点，对家族企业的发展现状做了简单概述，对内部控制问题产生进行了研究，并以内部控制框架为主线，从控制环境，风险评估，控制活动，信息与沟通，两全分离等几个方面系统分析了家族企业内部控制的特征，提出了加强家族企业内部控制的建议。
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Answer 1

This article starts with the internal control status of family enterprises, summerizes on their development and studies on the problems in internal control. It systematically analysed the characteristics in family enterprises internal control from different aspects including control environment, risk assessment, control activities, information and communication, as well as segmentation of control power. It also gives suggestion on how to strengthen and improve the internal control on family enterprises.

两全分离这个词有点模糊, 暂时翻成权利分级: segmentation of control power

追问

本人英语水平太差，几乎看不懂，呵呵，不知道如何取舍了，这两个我应该写哪一个呢？

追答

另外一个一看就是翻译软件翻的, 很多不通阿. 这不是很明显么. :))

Answer 2

Based on the present situation of the family enterprise internal control for the starting point，The family business development present situation to a simple overview,problems of internal control are studied,And with internal control framework for mainline,From the control environment, Risk Assessment ,Control Activities ,information and communication,121m separation from several aspects such as a systematic analysis of the characteristics of the family enterprise internal control,Proposes strengthening family enterprise internal control suggestion.

自己注意大小写哈！
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