Question

看看我写的这篇英语作文有没有问题，回答好的加分

Today is November 10 and winter has arrive.The weather get cold and it snow heavily.There are four seasons in Shanghai.They are spring,summer,autumn and winter.In spring,it is warm.In summer,it is hot.Many peoplelike having ice cream and soft drinks.In autumn,it is cold.We can see many fallen leaves.In winter,it is cold.We can make snowmen in the yard.
The weather is very changeable in Shanghai.

Answer 1

Today is November 10 and winter is coming.The weather gets cold and it snows heavily.There are four seasons in Shanghai.They are spring,summer,autumn and winter.In spring,it is warm, while in summer,it is hot. Many people like having ice cream and soft drinks in summer.In autumn,it is cold, and we can see many fallen leaves.In winter,it is freezing, but we can make snowman in the yard.
The weather is changeable in Shanghai.
没有什么大错误。我稍稍改了下第一、二句的动词，另外加了些连词，这样比较通顺自然。
谢谢采纳。

Answer 2

Today it is November 10 and winter has arrived.The weather gets cold and it is snowing heavily.There are four seasons in Shanghai.They are spring,summer,autumn and winter.In spring,it is warm.In summer,it is hot.Many people like having ice cream and soft drinks.In autumn,it is cold.We can see many fallen leaves.In winter,it is cold.We can make snowmen in the yard.
The weather is very changeable in Shanghai.
就改了两三处，语法上没有什么大问题了，可是句子与意思的表达不太好吧

Answer 3

Today is 10th Nov. and winter has arrived. The weather is getting colder and it is now snowing heavily. There are four seasons in Shanghai: spring,summer,autumn and winter. In spring, it is warm.In summer, it is hot. Many people like having ice cream and soft drinks in hot weather. In autumn, it is cool. We can see many fallen leaves.In winter,it is cold. We can make snowmen in the yard.

The weather is very changeable in Shanghai.