Question

哈哈！！我问个英语的作业，但是要必须是老师的来回答，我的作业是写英语作文！！希望老师来帮帮我！！啊

XII 。书面表达 。（15分）
根据提示写一篇50词左右的英语短文，要求包括下面说列的要点。
1.星期六，天下着雨，很冷。
2.你和朋友詹妮（Jenny）在肯德基（KFC）边吃边聊
3.店里有个学生和他的朋友在举办生日聚会。

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我会写了，但是请各位老师来看看，我写得怎么样呀！！
Today is Saturday, it was raining and very cold. I have a friend, she is
Jenny. We at KFC and chat while we eat. At KFC, I saw a student
Students and his friend are having a birthday party. They enjoyed it very much.
Today, we also enjoyed it very much.

Answer 1

非常好！但是还有一个问题 语句有点不通顺
The Preal River
The Pearl River in Guangzhou. Is the mother of each of the Guangzhou people.

2124 kilometers long. The longest river in Guangdong. Is one of the longest river in China.

Today, the Pearl River has been contaminated by some. I really feel sad for this purpose. Pearl ah is very important to us. The 16th Asian Games held here soon. Therefore, we must protect it.
会了吗？

In this way, the mother river of Guangzhou, we will always beautiful!

Answer 2

你的短文里面有很多语法错误。看看我的改良版;
It was a rainy and cold Saturday. My friend Jenny and I decided to eat at KFC for lunch. Just as we were chatting alongside our food, we saw a few students celebrating their friends' birthday. They looked like they were enjoying themselves very much, and so were Jenny and I despite the weather.

Answer 3

The Preal River
The Pearl River in Guangzhou. Is the mother of each of the Guangzhou people.

2124 kilometers long. The longest river in Guangdong. Is one of the longest river in China.

Today, the Pearl River has been contaminated by some. I really feel sad for this purpose. Pearl ah is very important to us. The 16th Asian Games held here soon. Therefore, we must protect it.

In this way, the mother river of Guangzhou, we will always beautiful!

追问

翻译意思，但是和本文不符

Answer 4

Today is Saturday and it is raining cats and dogs.My friend Jenny and are sitting in KFC,eatingand chatting.There is a student holding his birthday party with his friend .

Answer 5

The Preal River
The Pearl River in Guangzhou. Is the mother of each of the Guangzhou people.

2124 kilometers long. The longest river in Guangdong. Is one of the longest river in China.

Today, the Pearl River has been contaminated by some. I really feel sad for this purpose. Pearl ah is very important to us. The 16th Asian Games held here soon. Therefore, we must protect it.
会了吗？

In this way, the mother river of Guangzhou, we will always beautiful!