Question

请大家帮忙修改一下英语作文吧，谢谢啦

As is kown to all , there are many diffculties in our way to grow up . When we struggle with them , maybe we will be failed . Most people hate failure very much because they think it is completely a bad thing .But from my perspective , failure is not necessarily a bad thing . Just like a coin has two sides , failure itself also has two opposite sides.In other words , failure will become a good thing in some occasions.
In the first place , failure may lead to success.People who in strong support of it assert that we can draw a lesson from the failure so that we will not make the same mistakes next time . In the second place , it can make us calm down.In our daily life , sometimes we may overestimate ourselves. At this time , failure can make us view ourselves reasonable .
In summation , failure is a double-edged sword , you can not be defeated by it , on the contrary , you should make the most use of it to make you become more excellent.

Answer 1

总的来说，你这篇文章写得不错，我估计你是参照翻译软件和自己的所学综合而写出来的，花了一定的心思。闲来无事，我就稍微帮你修改一下，仅供参考：
As is kown to all , there are many diffculties as we grow up（你原句里way to后面应该加名词或动名词，以为这里的to是介词，而不是不定式，比如the way to school） . When we struggle with them , we may fail in the end（其实这句话在整段文章中不起作用，完全可以删掉）. Most people hate failure very much because they think it is a completely bad thing .But in my opinion , that's not exactly right . Just like a two-side coin, failure itself has both advantages and disadvantages.In other words , failure will become a good thing in some occasions.
In the first place（一般就用firstly，secondly，当然你这样写也没错，但这样老师会认为你在凑字数） , failure may lead to success.People who strongly support it (原句中定语从句没有谓语动词，你也可以改成the strong backers ，这样更简洁）assert that we can learn from the failure so that we will not make the same mistakes next time . In the second place , it can calm us down.In our daily life , sometimes we may overestimate ourselves. At this time , failure can make us understand ourselves correctly（如果你要用原句 reasonable要用副词）。 .
In summation, failure is a double-edged sword , if you defeat and make the most use of it， you will become more excellent，or a losser you will be.(原文中语法没有错误，只不过我觉得逻辑上有点别扭）
个人意见，仅供参考，希望对你有帮助。