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The Common Points Shared by Both
The common points shared by Valentine’s Day and Double-Seventh Day is that both of them are celebrated as lover’s day, in which people will give gifts such as candy, roses, and chocolates to the people they like today, many people today even chose this day to make a proposal for their love and marriage during these two days.
Both of them are traditional festivals and have been celebrated for several thousand years, especially today in this highly developed world, both of them have been internationalized and are accepted by many people from different country and culture.
After we know clearly about the origin of the China’s Double-seventh Day and Valentine’s Day, differences appear in many aspects such as original society background, people’s way of thinking, and even some essential ones. China’s double-seventh day and Valentine’s Day are different in many aspects from past to pretence, and also in the way of their celebrating and the custom of the festival.
First, those two festivals are different from their origins. China’s Double-seven Day was originated in China’s agricultural society in which all the information of the festivals was about China’s country life including the old ox, the way to find a wife and the weaving maid, the work, and the details of the story developments. which means all the things happen in that time when china people was very believe in natural heaven .This is different from the west valentine’s day, which was originated during the time when people are deep ingrained inbuilt god and Jesus Christ in their mind. As we all know that china’s god was different from western gods
The way of celebrating those two festivals are different .In old china, in the story, this day was sent by the god to let the weaving maid and the cowherd to get together and see each other once a year. The story was tragedy .So the meaning people celebrating this day was to bless the couple. What’s more, every year in Seventh July, mostly it will rain, so legend go that the rain on that day was the tears of the couples who miss each other and haven’t seen for a year. People in this day bless the couple to stay together forever, at the same time they prey themselves to have someone to miss and love and wait. Because the weaving maid in the story was very good at weaving, this was very important in the old china for girls. Thus, at double-seventh day, the girls would gather in a square with the stars shining in the sky. they put holding needles and thread from behind to compete, the first one to thread the needle would be blessed by the weaving maid, they also will display their caved melons such as gold fish flowers and exquisite building and the best skilled cookies or delicacies.

Answer 1

The common points shared by Valentine’s Day and Double-Seventh Day is are that both of
is 改为are
them are celebrated as lover’s lovers’ day, in which people will give gifts such as candy,
lover’s变为lovers'
roses, and chocolates to the people they like today去掉 , many people today even chose
去掉today，因为前面in which已经表示在这一天了
this day to make a proposal for their love and marriage during these two days.
改为Many people even choose one of the two days to make a proposal for their love and marriage.选择这两天中的一天 更恰当吧

Both of them are traditional festivals and have been celebrated for several thousand years, especially today today去掉 in this highly developed world, both of them have been
去掉today,后面的in this highly developed world已经表达了在今天
internationalized and are accepted by many people from different country and different culture.culture 前面加了一个different
After having a clear knowledge about(we know clearly about) the origin of the China’s Double-
原句我改了。After having a clear knowledge about因为after 是介词，后面接句子不合适
seventh Day and westerner’s Valentine’s Day, differences appear in many aspects such as original society background, people’s way of thinking, and even some essential ones. China’s double-seventh day and Valentine’s Day are different in many aspects from past the past to
past 要改成the past 表示过去
presence now, (and also) like in the way of their celebrating and the custom of the two festivals. (and also) 我改成了like
First, those these two festivals are different from in their origins. China’s Double-seven Day
those 换成these 吧，这两个
was originated in China’s agricultural society in which all the information of the festivals去掉s
was 去掉，originate 起源于，用主动语态
吧 was about China’s country life including the old ox, the way to find a wife and the weaving maid, the work, and the details of the story developments. which means all the things happen in that time when china Chinese people(was very) believe in
believe in 信任, 不用was,去掉was very
natural heaven .This is different from the west valentine’s day, which was originated
去掉was, originate 不用被动语态
during the time when people are deep ingrained inbuilt god and Jesus Christ in their mind. As we all know that china’s god was different from western gods
As we all know, china’s god was different from western gods 原句as 不能单独作句子。
The way of celebrating those the two festivals are is different .In old china, in the story, this
those 改为the 这两种
day was sent by the god to let the weaving maid and the cowherd to get together and see
sent 改为given 更好吧 拜上帝所赐
each other once a year. The story was a tragedy .
tragedy 前面加a
(So the meaning of people celebrating this day) So the meaning of people celebrating this
原句改为So the meaning of people celebrating this day更好
day was to bless the couple. couple 加s 不是只有一对夫妻
What’s more, every year when it comes to the Seventh July in Seventh July,改为 every year when it comes to the Seventh July in Seventh July
mostly it will rain, so legend go （go 改为goes ）
that the rain（去掉 the） on that day was (the tears of) the yearning tears for the couples who (miss each other and)去掉 haven’t seen each other for a year.
这句话改成 the rain on that day was the yearning tears for the couples who haven't seen each other for a year.这个雨是那些有一年没见过面的夫妻流下的思念的泪水
People in this day bless the couple to stay together forever, at the same time they prey for themselves pray for oneself 为自己祈祷
to have someone to miss and love and wait. Because the weaving maid in the story was very good at weaving, this was very important in the old china for girls. Thus, at at 改为on ,因为是特定的时间
double-seventh day, the girls would gather
应该是gather together 吧，聚集在一起
in a square with the stars shining in the sky. they put holding needles and thread from behind to compete, the first one to thread the needle would be blessed by the weaving maid, they also will display their caved melons such as gold fish flowers and exquisite building and the best skilled cookies or delicacies.
这里用skillful 会更好一点
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Answer 2

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