Question

帮我修改一篇英语作文

我现在高一，写了一篇英语作文，请英语高手帮我修改一下，谢谢！
首先请看中文意思：
今天，我从我的语文老师那里听到了一篇文章。这篇文章是关于一个叫贺舒婷的女孩如何考进北京大学。
贺舒婷是一位普通高中的学生。当她还在高一时，她不知道她能否考进北京大学。因为北京大学是她的梦想，而她的成绩又不太好。一天，她看到了一个戴着眼睛的女孩在她们班上学习努力，成绩好。以前，她不喜欢像那个女孩一样能够一天到晚坐在座位上的学生。但在那时候，她发现一个问题，为什么她不能为考进北京大学而努力呢？从那以后，她开始为学习而奋斗。她比她们班上任何一个学生都还要努力。当她背上六本历史书时，她哭了，但她 没有放弃。时间流逝，她以640分的成绩考进了北京大学。她说：“没有事情是不可能的，如果你去做，你就会成功。”
当我听完这篇文章后，我感受很深。我知道我未来应该怎么做。我明白了一个真理：没有事情是不可能的。

请修改以下的文章：
Today, I heard an article from my Chinese teacher. The article is about a girl called He Shuting how she passed into the Peking University.
He Shuting was a student in an ordinary high school. When she was in senior one, she didn’t know if she could pass into the Peking University. Because the Peking University was her dream, and she didn’t study well. One day, she saw a girl with glasses who was hard-working and study well in her class. Formerly, she disliked the student liked that girl who could sat the seat from day and night. But at that time, she discovered a question, why she didn’t struggle for passing into the Peking University? From that on, she stared to struggle for study. She was harder than anybody in her class or her school. When she remembered six books of history, she was crying, but she didn’t give up. The time goes by; she passed into the Peking University by 640 points. She said” nothing is impossible, if you do, you will be successful.”
When I heard off this article, I had a deep feeling. I knew what I should do in future. And I realized a truth: nothing is impossible.

Answer 1

我给你改了一下，发现一些问题，并作出相应的修改，仅供参考。我只想说你的作文有点中国式的英语，而且一些词虽然意思对了但是用的场景不合适。还有时态的问题等，不过才高一写出这样的作文就不错了！
I heard a story from my Chinese teacher today. It is about a girl called He Shuting how she was admitted by the Peking University.
She was a senior student in an ordinnery school. When she was in senior one, she didn’t know if she could pass into the Peking University. Because the Peking University was her dream, while she didn’t study well. One day, she saw a girl with glasses who was a hard-working and studied well in her class. Formerly, she disliked the student like that girl who could sit the seat from day and night. But at that time, she found a problem, why not could she struggle for passing into the Peking University? From that moment on, she started to struggle for study. She studied harder than anybody in her class even in her school. When she recited six books of history, she was crying, but she didn’t give up. The time went by; she passed into the Peking University by 640 points finally. She said,” nothing is impossible, if you do, you will be successful.”
When I heard off this story, I was touched deeply. I knew what I should do in the future. I understood a truth: nothing is impossible.

Answer 2

Today, I heard an article from my Chinese teacher. The article is about , how a girl named He Shuting was admitted into the Peking University.
He Shuting was a student in a common high school. When she was in senior one, she didn’t know if she could pass into the Peking University. Because the Peking University was her dream, but she didn`t study well. One day, she met a girl wearing glasses who was hard-working and studied well in her class.At first, she disliked students who were similar with that girl who could sat down on the seat for all day . But at that time, she discovered a question, why didn’t she struggle for passing into the Peking University? From then on, she stared to spare no efforts to study. She was far more diligent than all the students in her class and even in her school. When she finally managed to bear six history books in her heart, she burst into tears, but she never gave up. With time passing by; she succeded in passing into the Peking University with a score as high 640 points. She said:" Nothing is impossible, only if you set your mind to do, you will make it.”
When I learnt this article, I got into a deep feeling. I kcame to realize what I should do in future. And I discovered a truth: nothing is impossible

Answer 3

Today, I heard an article from my Chinese teacher，which is about how a girl called He Shuting passed into the Peking University .
He Shuting was a student in an ordinary high school. When she was in senior one, she didn’t know whether she could pass into the Peking University. The Peking University was her dream, but she didn’t study well. One day, she saw a girl with glasses who was hard-working and studied well in her class. Formerly, she disliked the student liked that girl who could sat the seat from day and night. But at that time, she discovered a question, why didn’t she struggle for passing into the Peking University? From that time, she stared to struggle for study. She was harder than anybody in her school. When she remembered six books of history, she was crying, but she didn’t give up. With the passage of time; she passed into the Peking University by 640 points. She said” nothing is impossible, if you do, you will be successful.”
When I heard of this article, I was shocked. I know what I should do in the future. One word， I realized a truth: nothing is impossible.

Answer 4

Today, I heard an article from my Chinese teacher. The article is about a girl called He Shuting and how she got enrolled into the Peking University.
He Shuting was a ordinary high school student. When she was in senior one, she didn’t know if she could be accepted into the Peking University. But, the Peking University was her dream, and she didn’t study well. One day, she saw a girl with glasses who was hard-working and studies well in her class. Formerly, she disliked the student like that girl who could sit in their seat day and night. But at that time, she realized something wrong , why won't she work towards being accepted into the Peking University? From then on, she stared to study. She tried harder than anybody else in her class or school. When she memorized six books of history, she was crying, but she didn’t give up. Time goes by; she got accepted into the Peking University by 640 points. She said” nothing is impossible, if you believe that, you will be successful.”
after I heard this article, I had a strong feeling. I knew what I should do in future. And I realized : nothing is impossible.

Answer 5

Today, I heard my language teacher an article. This article is about how a girl named He Shuting admitted to Peking University. He Shuting is an ordinary high school student. When she was still high while, she did not know whether she admitted to Peking University. Because of Peking University was her dream, and her performance not good enough. One day, she saw a girl with glasses in their class, study hard, get good grades. Previously, she does not like girls like that as to the students seated all day long. But in that time, she found a problem, why she can not be admitted to Peking University and the effort? From