Question

请给我看一下这篇英语作文，改一下语法错误，谢谢

请给我看一下这篇英语作文，改一下语法错误，谢谢
Nowadays, Shanghai is really an attractive city with many landmarks. Every year, many visitors come to visit Shanghai. If someone comes to Shanghai, he may go to the Oriental Pearl TV Tower. It’s one of the tallest buildings in Shanghai, also in the world. Shanghai is a modern city, it’s known as the Shopping Paradise. We can buy many things from all over the world in Nanjing Road. It’s the busiest street in Shanghai. And we will have a Disney Park in Shanghai in the future. At that time, Shanghai must be an attractive city.

Answer 1

Shanghai is a modern city, it’s known as the Shopping Paradise.这句可能有点错误。这句话有两个主语，虽然主语是一样的。但最好中间添加连接词如and，或改为从句形式，如
Shanghai，which is known as the Shopping Paradise， is a modern city,
文中使用的Shanghai比较多，可用it代替。许多除了用many以外，还可以用lots of、a lot of、much（不可数）、 numerous、 a great many、a large number of等。
If someone comes to Shanghai, he may go to the Oriental Pearl TV Tower.本人认为此句比较像中国英语，像用中文直译英文。本人认为可与前一句联系，写成：
Every year, many visitors come to Shanghai to visit the Oriental Pearl TV Tower and other tourist attractions.

Answer 2

个人觉得，这篇文章没什么语法错误，总的来说写的还不错，条理还是很清楚的
祝学习进步，更上一层楼！
如果帮到你，请记得采纳，O(∩_∩)O谢谢

Answer 3

最后一句这样写吧
Shanghai will be an more attractive city.
你觉得呢？
整体来说感觉你的文章不错。

Answer 4

Shanhai太多，可用it代替

Answer 5

你有字典么？有英语字典的话，你看看有没有帮助，也可以找写书来看看....问老师也可以...