Question

各位英语高手，请帮我检查一下这段英文有哪些语法错误，请指点，万分感谢！

In Greek mythology, human beings were created by Prospero, he created human's body according to the god with water and mixed soil. In order to let the human's body which made from the mud live, he removed the good and evil characters from the different kinds of animals’ soul and locked in the mud man's chest. Then with the help of intelligence goddess Athena, made these mud which had half spirit gained spirituality, human was born. In the Yi Shi, all kinds of animals parasitic in Pangu's body swayed by the wind and then they became into the people living in the world.5 and the most famous myth of human coming into being was the Nvwa created human, because human did not occur after the heaven separated from the earth, so Nuwa created human with mud, and due to, exhausted, Nvwa made human by using rope scourge the mud into people, and the people made from use loess became rich people, while the people made of the losses of mud became poor people . Ancient Greece created human in the form of male reflected the Greek myth is the product of primitive society patriarchy, while Nuwa in China myth made human in the form of female which the product of matriarchal society, both were the products of society.
Secondly，Prometheus Hughes stolen sky fire to man world earth, imparting human skill, while in China myths are taken: ZuanMu flintlock ,the Fuxi's invention。It reflects the primitive man's enhancement of understanding and transforming nature of nature and the desire for conquering the nature。Prometheus who was punished due to Stealing sky fire for mankind , The archer and the Suns,Yu the Great, any one of them reflect the spirit of adventure and overcoming difficulty and heroic spirit of overcoming difficult, it has also expressed strong desire of mankind's conquering nature. Besides, Greek mythology also is the social epitome of Homer time , while in China the mythical kingdom of heaven has strong political color, all is reflection of that time. What is more, Greek mythology and Chinese mythology had many love story, such as Oedipus, Zeus and Europa, cowherd, change, TianXianPei etc.

Answer 1

难忘的一件事（开头）

朋友，你有忘不了的事吗？一定有，我也不例外。 那是一个春光明媚的春天，我们全校师生一早来到邛海公园。一踏进大门，就看见那五颜六色的鲜花，几只美丽的蝴蝶在花丛中翩翩起舞，连小蜜蜂也被这美景吸引住了。 呼！呼！一股带着腥臭味的空气迎面扑来，怎么啦？我们一定要查个水落石出。向前走，就来到了海边的一个小食店旁，同学们一看都目瞪口呆了，没想到这么美丽的邛海还有一处令人如此扫兴的地方：一只只带着满身油污的塑料口袋在海面上“飘荡”，各种各样饮料瓶在海面上“划船”，一条条小鱼在海面上“睡觉”。 怎么办呢？

每当我翻开手中的相册时，里面有一张相片最令我难忘。你看相片里有一个小女孩站在一个可爱的小雪人旁笑得那样开心。那个小女孩就是我，可爱的小雪人就是我第一次堆雪人的收获，这一次多么令人难忘啊！
记得那次我和爸爸妈妈6个人一同去玉龙雪山上玩，在半山腰时我们下了车，啊！玉龙雪山像童话中冰雪女王的家，银妆素裹，洁白无暇吸引了我，看看周围，哇，到处都是白茫茫的一片，真像进入了雪花般的梦幻。“对了，”我说，“这么多的雪，我们不如来一个堆雪人比赛吧！这么好的机会大家不会白白浪费吧！”大家都不约而同的说好。我说：“那好吧，我们两个人一组，分红、黄、蓝三队。”
我和妈妈被分在了蓝队，在爸爸的一声令下后，我们就开始堆起来。我们先抓起一把蓬松的白雪，把它捏成稍圆的球形，然后将雪球放在地上开始滚。我和妈妈齐心协力的滚啊滚，只见雪球越滚越大。我们一边滚一边把蓬松的地方捏实。终于一个又圆又大的雪球就OK了。下面我要做小雪人的头了，做头的时候我问妈妈：“妈妈，你小时候堆过雪人吧？”妈妈说：“当然了，那时候我们最喜欢冬天下雪了。雪停了以后，我和院子里小伙伴们，拿着小铲子和小桶，一起堆雪人。我们还用两个大纽扣做小雪人的眼睛，用红萝卜做小雪人的鼻子，用扫帚做小雪人的手。”说着，说着小雪人的脑袋也做好了，于是我把小雪人的头安在小雪人的身体上。我还把帽子和围巾取下来给小雪人带上。刚合适。于是我又跑到旁边去找了几个小石头，有两个当小雪人的眼睛，还有一个给小雪人做鼻子，还找了两根树枝做小雪人的手。哇！做好了，看着看着，那可爱的小雪人仿佛在对我笑呢！我看了另两对的雪人，他们也各有各的特色。爸爸说：“没有想到我女儿堆的雪人这么好！”听了这句话，我高兴的围着雪人唱啊跳啊，歌声飘荡在玉龙雪山的空中。
看到这张照片，我又仿佛看见了当时的情景，领略了当时的快乐，我情不自禁的笑了！
难忘的一件事

在我九岁时，发生了一件令我难忘的事，这件事好像是昨天发生的，我还记忆犹新。

“叮铃铃”放学的铃声响了，同学们叽叽喳喳地说个不停，讨论要到哪里去玩，我和几个小伙伴商量去踢足球。

我们找到了一块空地，就尽情地踢了起来，还有几个女生作为观众，在为我们喝彩，我们打得越来越精彩。突然，一个球飞过来，我接住了，很得意，闭上眼睛，用力地一踢，也不知把球踢到了哪个方向。只听见“呯――”的一声响，啊，是窗户玻璃被球砸碎了。只见那扇窗户里出现一位白发苍苍的老爷爷，朝外面看了一下，然后，又转身离去，好像要出来了。其他同学拉着我要跑，说：“那个老爷爷出来了，一定会骂你的，可能还要到老师那里告状。快走呀！”我还是站在那里一动不动，说：“我打碎了老爷爷的玻璃，要给老爷爷道歉。”其他伙伴也没有办法。

一会儿，那老爷爷真的来了，我走过去向老爷爷说：“老爷爷，对不起，我把您的玻璃打碎了。”那位老爷爷笑了笑，说：“只要你能知错就改，就是个好孩子。记住了，以后要小心。”我带着微笑说：“谢谢您，老爷爷。”

从此我不管做什么事都非常小心，有了错误，总会勇敢承认，知错就改

Answer 2

为了方便起见，我直接将错误改在原文中了，不一一列出，望理解。In Greek mythology, human beings were created by Prospero, he created human's body according to the god with water and mixed soil. In order to let the human's body which（was） made from the mud live, he removed the good and evil characters from the(去掉这个the) different kinds of animals’ soul and locked（them） in the mud man's chest. Then with the help of intelligence（改为intelligent） goddess Athena,（who） made these mud which had half spirit gained spirituality, human was born. In the Yi Shi, all kinds of animals parasitic in Pangu's body（were） swayed by the wind and then they became into（去掉这个into） the people living in the world.5(不知道这个5是什么意思) and the most famous myth of human coming into being was the Nvwa created（改为creating） human, because human did not occur after the heaven separated from the earth, so Nuwa created human with mud, and due to, exhausted, Nvwa made human by using rope scourge(这个词的意思是鞭打，抽斥，你应该想表达的意思是塑造，建议用shape,而且是ing形式，即shaping) the mud into people, and the people made from use loess became rich people, while the people made of the losses of mud became poor people . Ancient Greece created human in the form of male reflected the Greek myth is the product of primitive society patriarchy, while Nuwa in China myth made human in the form of female which the product of matriarchal society, both were the products of society.
Secondly，Prometheus Hughes stolen sky fire to man world earth, imparting human skill, while in China myths are taken: ZuanMu flintlock ,the Fuxi's invention。It reflects the primitive man's enhancement of understanding and transforming nature of nature and the desire for conquering the nature。Prometheus who was punished due to Stealing sky fire for mankind , The archer and the Suns,Yu the Great, any one of them reflect the spirit of adventure and overcoming difficulty and heroic spirit of overcoming difficult, it has also expressed strong desire of mankind's conquering nature. Besides, Greek mythology also is the social epitome of Homer time , while in China the mythical kingdom of heaven has strong political color, all is reflection of that time. What is more, Greek mythology and Chinese mythology had many love story, such as Oedipus, Zeus and Europa, cowherd, change, TianXianPei etc.