Question

英语作文修改

题目：

　　Create a green campus

　　1.建设绿色校园十分重要

　　2.绿色校园不仅指绿色环境

　　3.为了建设绿色校园我们应该……

with the development of economy, an increasing number if new campus have been build, morden facilities and high buildings but we may forget to creat the campus green which will lead us to harmony.
However, green campus do not mean only green environment as you thought, green cluture and green politeness are the two majors which ask us to protect our environment from damaging, to help a habit of balancing study and pass-time, to be polite to your classmates.
According to what have mentioned above, we can draw a conclusion that there is an effectve way to creat green campus. Fistly, put our rubbish to the dustbin is a kind of tiny thing but dose a great step. Secondly, pay attention to waht you say and what you do is the most significant way to creat a green campus. Last but not least, we can not deny that working hard is the primary method to achieve our goal.
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Answer 1

累死了。写的不错，但是微小问题好多。有的是改语法，有的是改拼法，其他的改动基本就是让它看起来更顺、更地道... 先把改完的放上来吧，你有什么疑问再追问我，如何？一个个注释真的好累，不好意思。

With the development of the economy, an increasing number of new campuses have been built, with modern facilities and tall buildings, but the harmonious green campus is sometimes forgotten.

Unlike what you may think, a green campus does not merely mean a green environment. Green culture and green manners are the two major aspects of protecting our environment from damage: habitually balancing study and pastime, and being polite to classmates.

In conclusion, there is an effective way to create a green campus. First, putting our waste in trash cans is a tiny thing that can accomplish a great deal. Second, paying attention to what we say and what we do is the most significant way to create a green campus. Last but not least, we cannot deny that working hard is the primary method of achieving our goal.

Answer 2

With(大写) the development of economy, an increasing number of(笔误，if 改为 of) new campus has(单数) been built(用过去分词), with (加个介词作状语)morden facilities and high buildings ，（）\but we may forget to creat the campus green which will lead us to harmony.