Question

大家好，有没有哪位高手能不能帮我看看这篇英语作文哪里要修改的，谢谢啊。

On the important of a name
In recent years,it is very popular for people to discuss whether one's name is important or not.To this phenomenon,people's opinions vary.
Some think that that it is very important for one to have a good name.Firstly, a good name stands for parents' high expectations on their children.Besides,it can help other people to remeber you more easy. Others,however,believe that name is not important because it is just a mark for others to know you.Furthermore,it does't mean that a good name will make one become successful in the furture.
All in all, as far as I am concerned,we should not go to extremes.on one hand, it is admitted that a good name will make others know you more easy.on the other hand,parents should not put all their expectations on children's name.

Answer 1

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Counts:

Sentence count 5

Word count 135

Scores:6 out of 10  Fair

你可以把图片下载下去，我已经用电脑给你改完了，上面是你的原文，标着其他颜色的线代表着你有不同的错误。

How to Improve Your Text:（如何提高）

- Correct your spelling and grammar mistakes

- Use shorter and simpler sentences (9-17 words per sentence).

- More than half of your sentences are negative. Please rephrase.

总结，

这位同学，你要注意一下你打英语的格式了，还有多练习一下英语打字，减少错误的发生。

如果你用复杂句式不熟练的话，建议用简单句代替。

不要用过多的否定句，用肯定句表达也会更有说服力。