Question

求高手对这篇六级作文进行修改，给出一些修改意见也可以，比如替换一些高分词汇啊，修改一下句型结构啊

In recent years, an increasing number of people are beginning to notice that whether the Three Georges Dam is good or bad, especially among the young and heated debates are right on their way. Many experts point out that the drought in the Yangtze River is caused by the Chain reaction of the Three Georges Dam, which led to a loss over 1 billion$. There is no denying the fact that drought is a serious problem: the country authorities should take strong measures to deal with it.

People hold different views toward this phenomenon. Some believe that there are economic benefits such as flood control and hydroelectric power. While some other protest vigorously. In their points, the benefits are really ridiculous and harmful. For one thing, they are concern about the loss of many valuable archaeological and cultural sites, for another, the environmental disruption the dam will cause.

In my view, the Three Georges Dam has its own reference values. However, just like everything has both its good and bad sides, it also has its own disadvantages, such as the pollution and the ecological problems. We should do something such as planting more trees , adjusting the working time of the sluice to improve the present situation. In a word, the whole society should pay close attention to the problem of the dam, only in this way can we see a better situation in the future.

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Answer 1

1.flood control应该不属于economic benefits吧
2.vigorously意为精力旺盛地,不适合做protest的状语
3.paragraph2第三行,"they are concern about..."中concern 应改为concerned,系动词后明显不应有其他动词
4.谈及三峡的disadvantage时作者提到pollution,个人认为作为水利工程不会带来明显的污染问题,改为geology(地质的)或许更贴切

追问

1、economic benefits such as flood control and hydroelectric power 来自百度文库“The Three Georges Dam” 洪水会带来经济损失，能控制洪水，属于economic benefits。2、While some other protest vigorously 这句话来自沪江版英语标准作文，我会再找几个英语好的同学问下看看；3、这句话的修改我完全介绍，非常感谢。4、三峡带来的污染问题，百度里一搜索一大堆，不过地质问题也是有的，所以我决定加上地质问题。

追答

好吧,以上完全是个人观点,同意作者认为flood control 带来economic benefits
另外这句话没看懂:especially among the young and heated debates are right on their way.(第二行)
如果especially among the young 是为了修饰前文的an increasing number of people ,那么个人认为为了避免歧义应该在young后面断句比较好

Answer 2

1.英语写作中无冒号！！
2.“just like everything has both its good and bad sides,”可以改为“just like a coin has two sides"比较简洁。