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各位英语高手麻烦帮忙修改下我的演讲稿，初稿已完工（可提供中文）急求！！！

There is such a power.
With it, the burgeon fights against the heavy rock, just to embrace the first ray of sunshine in its life.
With it, the stream pours its way day and night, just for the glory into the infinite ocean.
With it, the silkworm breaks through the fetter, just for the first fly in the sky.
This force is called faith.
When you are melancholy for your tininess and mediocrity, it teaches you, “The past doesn’t equal the future.”
When you sign for the frustration and failure, it reminds you, “There is no defeat , only the temporary suspension of success
when you feel depressed for the hopeless of sucess, it tells you " God’s Detention is not God 's Rejection !"
when you encounter various difficulties , it reminds me “everything always happens for a reason and it may do you good, "
when you face with tremendous challenges trembling, it teaches you " the more you fear about it , the more you do it, and you will it's as horrible as you thought" and then you can pluck up your heart and move on.
When you want to give up, it tells you,” Winners never give up and quitters will never succeed.”So you are encouraged and continue to struggle.
We should believe that faith can make people never cease to exploiting in darkness, never quit in failure, never stop pursuing in frustration. any huge difficulty will pale into insignificance and any enormous hardship and danger will come to unsurprising in face of this power。
Because of faith, the great musician Beethoven could create rather fantastic “the heroic symphony”. Because of faith, GouJian could endure hardships and defeat State Wu with only 3 thousand soldiers. Because of faith, Si Maqian could swallow terrible humiliation for 11 years, and complete <ShiJi>, a 520-thousand-word masterpiece.
Faith makes a full man. Faith maybe comes from banality, but it will develop into greatness.
Apart from those distant events, you think again. If not faith, how(?) are the courage for such a long march, 25 thousands kilometers; how could the courage for King George 6 overcome the language barriers and make the first public speech in his life. If not faith, how could people walk across the Sahara dessert with only a tiny apple; how would it happen that in the WenQuen earthquake people buried under ruins for over 100 hours were still alive.
Hence, it can be learned, how powerful faith is!
The survival of mankind, the progress of the society, and the rise of China, are inseparable from faith. Sometimes, it is a kind of power or hope. And more often, it is a kind of an indestructible spirit. Let this spirit become the sun in our heart, warm our heart and light our road in the future!

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Answer 1

第六段：be equal to 这是通常的用法，不建议用epual 作动词
第十段： fear about 建议改为for fear of sth.
第十一段：you are encouraged and continue to struggle 建议改为you are encouraged to continue to struggle for your dream.
第十四段： but it will develop into greatness 建议改为 but it will contribute to greatness.
第十五段： you think again 建议改为 please think again(更有礼貌）
WenQuen改为 WenChuan 似乎更好。
light our road in the future 建议改为 light our road to the future(介词to表示 通 往......的路）
文章写得不错，由于本人能力有限，就只能提一点肤浅的的见解了。

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呵呵。。谢谢哦。。

Answer 2

有这样一种力量。有了它,嫩芽可以冲开重石的压服,只是去拥抱它的生活中第一缕阳光……详细内容我会慢慢的给你发过去的，因为太长了，呵呵
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额，我不是要翻译成中文呢！！！就修改下或者让它更地道更像演讲稿就行了。。麻烦了哦！！

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我支持楼上的见解

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就这样？？- -！