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就是一个我自己写的句子不知道语法上有什么错误 请各位高手帮忙指导下 具体的句子在补充中 多谢了

A large number of undergraduates are eager to join the army than extremely demands advanced technology applied to mang military field.It is significant that the troop enrolls talent who possessed professional knowledge from university. 帮忙看下 谢了 再帮忙看下有没什么歧义 希望尽快回复多谢

Answer 1

首行的than应改为that；technology applied to mang military field改为technology in military fields更简洁；最后一句改为It is significant that the troop should enroll talent with professional knowledge acquired at university. 即：
A large number of undergraduates are eager to join the army that extremely demands advanced technology in military fields. It is significant that the troop should enroll talent with professional knowledge acquired at university

Answer 2

A number of statements undergraduates are no more eager to join the army than increasing demands on technology are applied.first mang field to Windows. It is significant that the troop enrolls talent who carries knowledge leads to sound.

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are applied.first mang field to Windows 这个的位置是什么意思啊 没太看懂

Answer 3

advance改成advancing形容物用-ing型