Question

英语作文修改

Do you remember the memorize of the past? You were still a little girl ,an apple in my eyes.But I don’t know when something has changed . The conversation between you and me gets less and less. Here ,I hope you understand me. Do you know why I don’t forbid you to be in the school party. According to my personal experience, it’s a waste of time. As a student, you should have a sense of responsibility to study. You own the intelligence and ability ,so I’m sure you will get A in all subjects . A represents you have mastered the knowledge in this section. You can make contributions to the human beings . So in the first place ,to be s student, it’s very important to study well. what’s more.In brief, the rules are good for you. If you keep on doing that to the end, you will get talent coming out of your ears. No matter how far we are become best friends again, I’ll be your shoulder when you cry. I wish that all your days will be bright as the sun.

Answer 1

Writing Review(写作总结与估计分数)
Sentence count ：15
Word count ：185
Scores: 6 out of 10 （Fair）
改错与纠正：
Do you remember the memorize of the past? You were still a little girl ,an apple in my eyes.But （改成"However," 更好一些 ）I don’t know when something has changed . The conversation between you and me gets less and less. Here ,I hope you understand me. Do you know why I don’t forbid you to be in the school party.（改成问号） According to my personal （语法错误，my 和personal 不能连用，改成personal experience of mine更好一些）experience, it’s a waste of time. As a student, you should have a sense of responsibility to study. You（改成Your） own the intelligence and ability ,so I’m sure you will get A in all subjects . A represents you have mastered the knowledge in this section. You can make contributions to the human beings . So in the first place ,to be s student, it’s very important to study well. what’s more.In brief, the rules are good for you. If you keep on doing that to the end, you will get talent coming out of your ears. No matter how far we are become best friends again, I’ll be your shoulder when you cry. I wish that all your days will be bright as the sun.
How to Improve Your Text:（如何提高）
- Correct your grammar mistakes
- Your text is rather simple. You may want to use more complex words and sentence structures.
总结，
这位同学，我认为你应该尝试一些复杂句式，这样你的作文读起来就会在另一个水平上了，你在这篇文章的使用句式过于简单了。
有一些语法错误，注意改正。
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我最近正在做一项英语作文写作调查，如果你有什么需要批改的作文可以交给我、

Answer 2

Do you remember the GOOD OLD DAYS? WHEN you were still a little girl , YOU WERE an apple in my eyes.But I don’t know when something STARTED changING . The conversation between you and me gets less and less. Here ,I hope you understand me. Do you know why I don’t STOP you FROM the school party. According to my personal experience, it’s a waste of time. As a student, you should have a sense of responsibility FOR study. You HAVE the intelligence and ability ,so I’m sure you will get A in all subjects . A represents you have mastered the knowledge in this section. You can make contributions to the human beings . So in the first place , AS A student, it’s very important to study well. what’s more.In brief, the rules are good for you. If you keep on doing that to the end, you will get talent coming out of your ears. No matter how far we are NOW, WE WILL become best friends again AND I’ll be your shoulder when you cry. I wish that all your days will be AS bright as the sun.

Answer 3

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