Question

纠错，英语作文纠错。我今年初三，帮忙看一下这篇作文有没有什么错误，谢谢~

Dear John
Thank you so much for your email.I’m very happy to answer your questions.
I often start my summer vacation in July and I usually spend 2 months relaxing myself. I usually watch TV in summer . Because I think it cannot only help us learn what is happening throughout the world,but also help us learn more knowledge.
I won’t go to a summer school, because I think summer vacation is used to relax myself and is used to help our brain rest so that we can focus on our lessons when we go to school.I want to go swimming most.Summer is hot and we can felel comfortable when we are simming..Swimming can build up our strength and reduce the chance of illness . And I think it is a waste of time to go to a summer school .
How about your summer vacation ? Is it interesting ? I hope that your survey will be a success .
I wish to visit you in Canada one day.
Yours,
Su Hua
是feel ,不是felel

Answer 1

1.Because I think it cannot only help us learn what is happening throughout the world,but also help us learn more knowledge. [can not分开来写]
2.Summer is hot and we can felel comfortable when we are simming。[feel 拼写错误]
3. And I think it is a waste of time to go to a summer school .[这句话换个位置，放在这段最后很奇怪，跟前面一句话连接不起来]
4.你think重复使用太多次了，可以用 I consider / I believe/in my opinion 等
5.注意连词的使用 可以用 In addition / Moreover 不要总用And

追问

额， cannot连一起不是也可以的嘛…
我也觉得think太多了……
那这种作文放在中考里要扣多少分啊？……

追答

因为你要表达的是not only ,but also不仅而且的意思啊
我觉得分开来表达比较清楚。
中考的话，让我回忆回忆，好像那时候我写作水平也差不多如此的。主要句式变化尽量多一点。
我也是苏州的哦。

追问

握手！同是苏州的啊，这是我们今年的题目，我突然间想到，然后就凭着记忆写上来看看有木有大的语法错误……
这种作文会不会扣到5分啊？

追答

我那年英语一共就扣了8分唉。我觉得5分差不多吧。以后注意写作文不要反复地表达一个意思哦。
还有词组尽量不要重复使用。你看你relax myself用了两次，be used to和learn 在一句话中用了两次。不过思路还是很清晰的，不错的

追问

= = 我本来想英语能不能拿125+，前面已经扣了3分了，后面5分，只能122了…
难过……

Answer 2

这个作文的题目是什么啊？ 我也是九年级的 呵呵

追问

苏州市中考，我写的作文，凭记忆写出来，看看有没有错误来着……

追答

一般的中考作文首先最关键的就是写简单句的 应为那样不容易错 并且很爱给分的.......你的作文难度蛮大的 还是求稳一点 少写复合句 这是我们英语老师告诉我们的...呵呵

Answer 3

抱歉 我也9年级
没看出来

追问

…… 那我一下子I，一下子we，严格上讲会不会扣分啊？

追答

我也经常这样 不过没扣过分