Question

英语高手帮帮忙，帮我看下我的这篇英语作文通不通顺，有无病句，感激不尽。。。

My view on Balanced Personal Development It goes without saying that balanced personal development is of great importance to us nowadays.But what on earth is balanced personal development?Well,to my mind,it means that we should not only do a good job in our studies,but also in other aspects,such as virtue,social gathering,communication and the abilities to deal with all kinds of problems.As we know,virtue is also important to a person.In addition,I want to study literature, biology, chemistry, and knowledge. Although there are some hard, but i think that life is full.Every day i often work out and play football, basketball and badminton and tennis. Not delay the case studies, an increase of knowledge and practice, it is both good things. I'm going to be of all-round development of good student, for my future development bba acc fin paves the way.

Answer 1

错漏很多哦，而且很多中式英文，单词的词性用法有误，单复数的运用也有误。
1、It goes without saying that 要改为：There is no doubt that 或者It is of no doubt that...
2、virtue,social gathering,communication and the abilities to deal with all kinds of problems. 这里有逻辑错误，首先and连接的必须是同类事物。但是道德、聚会、交流、解决问题的能力，很明显不是同类事物来的，建议以后不要为了拼长句凑字数，来盲目添加单词进同一个句子。
3、literature, biology, chemistry, and knowledge 这个也是跟2同样的问题！逻辑错误。knowledge 知识本身就包含了前面的文学、生物、化学了。
4、Although there are some hard, but ... 首先，要表达困难，这里应该用名词的difficulties，hard是形容词，不能用在这里。其次，已经有although来引导让步状语从句了，就不能用but。
5、life is full？这句是要表达什么呢？意义未明哦
6、Every day i often work out 已经有every day了，就不能用often. 因为这2个词都是表示频率的，放在一起就矛盾了。
7、Not delay the case studies, an increase of knowledge and practice, it is both good things.？？这句也是表意不清！而且，both是两者，要用复数的，跟前面的it is不能连用。
8、I'm going to be of all-round development of good student 想要表达我会成为一个全面发展的好学生的话，应该是：I'm going to be an all-round developed student.
9、for my future development bba acc fin paves the way.？？bba acc??在要说什么？

Answer 2

错了！but 改成BUT

Answer 3

文章总体来说写得十分精彩，但有几处略有瑕疵，以下是修改后的文章：

My view on Balanced Personal Development goes without saying that balanced personal development is of great importance to us nowadays.But what on earth is balanced personal development?Well,to my mind,it means that we should not only do a good job in our studies,but also in other aspects,such as virtue,social gathering,communication and the abilities to deal with all kinds of problems.As we know,virtue is also important to a person.In addition,I want to study literature, biology, chemistry, and so on.(knowledge包含了前面的几项). Although some of those are hard , but I think that life is colorful（这里想用full表充实的意思，但用colorful显得更有文采）. I often work out and play football, basketball and badminton and tennis（这一句中every day 和often重复了）. Not delay the case studies, an increase of knowledge and practice, those are both good things(both用于表两者都，因此系动词用复数形式). I'm going to be of all-round development of good student to pave the way for the future
.(这一句的问题很大，你想表达的意思是“为未来铺路”改成这样会通顺无误一些)

但愿我的回答能给你帮助

Answer 4

我帮你翻译一下就成这样了：
我个人的均衡发展观不言而喻，平衡个人的发展非常重要的我们是nowadays.But什么地球上是平衡的个人发展？好了，我心里去，这意味着我们不仅要做好我们的好工作研究，但在其他方面，如德，社交聚会，沟通和能力来处理各种problems.As我们也知道，美德也是很重要的一个person.In此外，我要学文学，生物学，化学和知识。虽然有一些辛苦，但我认为生命是full.Every一天，我经常制定和踢足球，篮球，羽毛球和网球。不拖延案例研究，对知识和实践的增加，它既是好东西。我要成为全面发展的好学生，对我的未来发展BBA ACC鳍铺平了道路。