Question

短文改错，在线等。急需！！！

Dear Juck,
I am very glad to receive your e-mail.As you say, Super Girls are real very popular in Chian these days and the champion Li Yuchun has lots of fans.
Some people think Super Girls are popular because of common people are allowed to voice their own opinion,Beside,they broke traditional values of beauty.So I think it is wrong for young peopleto admire Super Girls too much,because it can mislead young people.we should not have real heroes to learn from and work hard to the future of our country.Why do you think of this?

Answer 1

已经为你订正好了
Dear Jack,
I am very glad to receive your e-mail.As you say, Super Girls are really very popular in China these days and the champion Li Yuchun has lots got of fans.
Some people think Super Girls are popular because ordinary people are allowed to voice their own opinions, Beside,they break traditional values of beauty.So I think it is wrong for young peopleto to admire Super Girls too much,for it may mislead young people.we should not have real heroes to learn from and work hard for the future of our country.What do you think of that?

追问

不好意思，麻烦在问一下 Li Yuchun has lots got of fans这句中为什么是加了got这样改啊？

追答

1 为了口语化的需要
2 强调她到目前为止的状态和受欢迎的程度

追问

那不就是其实不加也是可以的么？

追答

当然可以不加，但语感告诉我，该加。你做主吧。我尊重你，而你相信我。本来就是百度平台嘛。

追问

恩。我这是高中的短文改错，一般是10处错误那样的简单改错啦。这里they break 为什么不用成完成时呢？

追答

很简单，指的是一种不以时间为转移的客观规律，所以用一般现在时。今天，昨天和明天都是如此

追问

谢谢了。

Answer 2

Dear Jack,
I am very glad to receive your e-mail. As you said, Super Girls is really very popular in China these days and Li Yuchun, the champion, has won lots of fans.（超女是一档节目，谓语用单数is）
Some people think Super Girls is popular because ordinary people are allowed to voice their own opinions. （其实这句话有点歧义，是想表达因为大众可以唱出自我所以一些人觉得超女很流行？还是想表达一些人认为超女之所以流行是因为大众能够唱出自我？）Besides,it has broken traditional values of beauty. So （这里用so表示结果本人认为逻辑不对，应该转折however/but才对吧？）I think it is wrong for young people to to admire Super Girls too much because it may mislead the young. We should not have real heroes to learn from and work hard for the future of our country. （若是想表达不该崇拜偶像的话work hard 前面的and最好换成but）What do you think of that?（问对方意见如何用what do you think of...）