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英语作文求修改。。谢谢了

题目：Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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As we all know that in the childhood is the footstep of human’s life. To be a good member of society is not only an important ability but also a crucial part in a people’s life. So, there are two ways to be good members of society.

Some people think that parents should teach children. This is a correct way. A saying said that partents are good teachers for children. Parents know more children’s advantage and disadvantage than others, so it’s really convenient to do so.

However, some people strongly reckon that school is the place to learn this. This opinion also has its benefits. Human are social animals. To give a place for children also means giving a chance to improve their communication ability and expression ability, which makes children more creative to be a good society member.

I think we need an enviroment to grow and also need peoper activities to express ourselves. So I tend to the second opinion. But to be a valuable member of any community is not like learning a simple skill, it needs more experience. It is something that an individual goes on learning throughout life and it is the responsibility of every member of a society to take responsibility ofr helping the younger generation to become active and able members of that society.

Answer 1

有些人认为父母应该教导孩子们如何成为社会的好公民。然而,另一些人认为学校是地方学习这方面的知识。讨论这两个观点并给出你自己的观点。
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我们都知道,在童年是人的生命的脚步。要成为一名优秀的社会成员的不仅是一种重要的能力的一个重要组成部分,但也在一个人的生命。所以,有两种方式是社会的好公民。
有些人认为父母应该教导孩子。这是一个正确的方法。一种说法是说partents好老师对孩子们。父母们知道更多的孩子比其它的优势与劣势,因此,它是很方便。
然而,一些人强烈地认为学校是地方学习这方面的知识。这个观点也有它的好处。人类是群居动物。给一个地方也意味着给孩子一个机会来提高他们的沟通能力与表达能力,使得孩子更有创造性的事情是一个美好的社会成员。
我想我们需要的环境下成长,也需要peoper活动来表达自己的感情。所以我倾向于第二意见。要成为一个有价值的成员就像学习一种社区不是简单的技巧,它需要更多的经验。它是一种个人都会学习一生的责任,它是一个社会的每一个成员负责帮助年轻一代的一致性,可以更积极的社会成员。

1 第二段要自己写。
2第四段错了。把partents改成parents（父母）
3第六段错了。 把peoper改成proper（适当的）

希望楼主采纳。

Answer 2

1.As we all know that in the childhood is the footstep of human’s life这句话中that容易误解，建议改为As we all know,that in the childhood is the footstep of human’s life.
2.but also a crucial part in a people’s life people 为复数名词，做单数名词时译为民族，改为 person's 或者去掉a
3.A saying said that partents are good teachers for children.建议改为 As an English saying goes:"parents are good teachers for children."
4. Parents know more children’s advantage and disadvantage 建议改为 Parents know more about children’s advantages and disadvantages
5.which makes children more creative 建议把creative 改为likely
6.need peoper activities to express ourselves peoper 改为proper
7.take responsibility ofr helping 改为take responsibility for helping
8.become active and able members of that society 中able 建议改为capable
感觉水平蛮高的，词汇量也挺大，不定式作主语用的最多，错误不多，很不错啊

Answer 3

第一段第一句缺少主语，可以去掉in，第二段最后一句话 it is really convenient 是不是可以换个更贴切的词，convenient 太直接了。第三段，最后一句 成为社会的一员 society 是名词。最后一段长句太多了，好的文章应该是长短句相见的，你可以用一些句型把最后一段稍改一下，会更加的完美的。

Answer 4

As we all know, The childhood stage is the footstep of human life, To be a good member of society is not only means you got an important ability but also a crucial part in a people’s life. So, there are two ways to be good members of society.

Answer 5

不错，实际，抨击强