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Some people argue that teaching children of different abilities together benefits them all. Others believe that intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

For year ,how to deal with the education of the students who possess different intelligences has been a long-time controversial issue.
On the one hand,some people believe that it can be beneficial to all the students, if they are taught together. First,children can learn different views of a certain issue from their classmates who have different knowledge backgrounds and various way of thinking, which would ,effectively, expend their vision about the world and stimulate them think more innovatively and actively. Additionally,studying and discussing with peers with different abilities and interests can help them develop their ability of expression through the process of expressing their knowledge or opinions to those who has relatively inferior intelligences. During this process,children need to use all kinds of communication skills they know to make sure that their listeners fully understand . Last but not least, parents may me think it is unfair to treat students separately As they pay the same amount of tuition and fees for the schooling of their children, they believe that all the students should be treated equally and receive the aducation from schools.
On the other hand,segregating students with different abilities has its own inherent advantages. Studying together with intelligent children in one classroom,to average students, may cause more peer pressure and dampen their self-confidence, which will have badly effects on these student academic performance and personality development. Moreover ,it may be easier for teachers to arrange the schedule of teaching and contents of the assignments for their students teaching the students of a similar intelligence level may save the time for teachers to balance the rates of teaching process as different students have different grasps fo what has been taught , and enable teachers to concentrate more to their method of teaching an handle their students easily.
In summary , I prefer to teach children of different intelligent together ,at the same time schools should provide differen levels of electives to meet a the range of students with different level of aptitudes . Only in this way can average students feel ease about themselves and can intelligent students be satisfied with their education at school.

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1. 原文字数365，考试一定注意把握时间
2. 文章结构不太合理，主要是陈述论点，论证乏力，可以适当减少论点，加强论证。
3. 第二段：观点一，观点二，都是讲交流，重复；观点三，公平问题，用钱来衡量比较无力，建议从心理上讲
4. 第三段：观点一，压力问题，good；观点二，教学资源分配，good；
5. 少用模板才可突破

With the aim to produce elite students, some schools now eager to gather students of special talents and offer them particular treatment, while others prefer to teach students regardless of exceptional abilities. The pros and cons of these educational philosophies in accordance with students’ intelligences has been a long-time controversial issue.

Instead of being treated as losers, low-achieving students should be taught together with gifted students for equality and inspirations. It is undeniable that all students have the rights grasp the same educational opportunities and share educational resources fairly. Otherwise it might lead to negative attitudes toward study for lower aspirations in study. Furthermore, staying with someone distinguish highly encourages slow students to catch up with peers and face challenges, while grouping study shows discrimination and fosters lower self-esteem. Thus, to avoid widen the gap between the low and high achievers and to against resistant to schooling, teaching children of different abilities together is more reasonable.

However, treating gifted students the same as others might seriously hamper their personal development. For instance, a mathematics prodigy tackles a tricky problem briskly, it makes no sense to force him or her to participate in an ordinary curriculum and waste their time. Meanwhile, studying with high achievers cause slow students to feel depressed and cast doubt on their effort. As a result, grouping study might be easier for teachers adjust materials and methods of instruction to students’ aptitude and twist their perceptions of abilities and potentials. Also, it releases the students from peer pressure and drives them toward high performance.

On the basis of above factors, I prefer to teach children of different intelligent together, which enables students to compete with others equally and offers a positive environment. At the same time schools should provide different levels of electives to meet the range of students with different level of aptitudes.