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《山中访友》出自著名诗人、散文家李汉荣先生之手,是他发表于1995年第三期《散文》杂志的一篇杰作。
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走出门,就与微风撞了个满怀,风中含着露水和栀子花的气息,早晨,好清爽!
不骑车,不邀游伴,也不带什么礼物,就带着满怀的好心情,踏一条幽径,独自去访问我的朋友。
那座古桥,是我要拜访的第一个老朋友。啊,老桥,你如一位德高望重的老人,在这涧水上站了几百年了吧?你把多少人马度过对岸,滚滚水送向远方。你弓着腰,俯身凝望着水中的那人影、鱼影、月影。岁月悠悠,波光明灭,泡沫聚散,唯有你依然如旧。
走进这片树林,鸟儿呼唤我的名字,露珠与我交换眼神,每一株树都是我的知己,它们迎面送来无边的清脆,每棵树都在望着我。我靠在一棵树上,静静地,仿佛自己也是一棵树,我脚下长出的出根须,深深扎进泥土和岩层,我的头发长成树冠,我的胳膊变成树枝,我的血液变成树汁,在年轮里旋转、流淌。
这山中的一切,那个不是我的朋友?我热切的跟他们打招呼:你好,清凉的山泉!你捧出一面明镜,是要我重新梳妆吗?你好,汩汩的溪流!你吟诵着一首首小诗,是邀我与你唱和吗?你好,飞流的瀑布,你天生的金嗓子,雄浑的男高音多么有气势。你好,陡峭的悬崖,深深的峡谷衬托着你挺拔的身躯,你高高的额头上仿佛刻满了智慧。你好,悠悠的白云,你洁白的身影让天空充满宁静,变得更加湛蓝。喂,淘气的云雀,你叽叽喳喳的在谈些什么呢?我猜你们津津乐道的是飞行中看到的好风景。
捡起一朵落花,捧在手中,我嗅到了大自然的芬芳清香;拾起一片落叶,细数精致的纹理,我看到了它蕴含的生命的奥秘,在它们走向泥土的途中,我加入了这短暂而别有深意的仪式;捧起一块石头,轻轻敲击,我听见远古火山爆发的声浪,听见时间的隆隆回声。
突然,雷阵雨来了,像有一千个侠客在天上吼叫,又像有一千个醉酒的诗人在云头吟咏,满世界都是雨。头顶的岩石像为我撑起的巨伞,我站立之处成了看雨的好地方,谁能说这不是天地给我的恩泽?
雨停了,幽谷里传出几声犬吠,云岭上掠过一群归鸟,我该回家了,我轻轻的挥手,告别山里的朋友,带回了满怀的好心情,好记忆,还带回一路月色。
作者简介
李汉荣系中国作家协会会员,陕西省政协委员,著名诗人、散文家,李汉荣散文佳作入选全国中学语文课本。多年来写作诗歌约3000首,散文随笔1000多篇,中短篇小说30余篇,在《人民文学》、《人民日报》、《诗刊》、《小说月报》、《青春》、《散文》、《散文百家》、《星星》等,及台湾的《创世纪》、《葡萄园》、《诗世界》、《联合报》副刊等海内外100多家报刊发表诗歌、散文、随笔、杂文、小说约2000多篇(首)。先后获市、省、全国各类奖项30余次。诗歌被《诗选刊》多次转载,收入中国作协编选的年度选本《中国最佳诗歌选》等选本,并入选北京大学编辑出版的《百年中国文学经典》、山东文艺出版社出版的《百年中国诗选》、中国儿童出版社出版的《二十世纪中国文学名篇佳作选》及台湾尔雅出版社出版的百年选本《新诗三百首》等权威选本;短篇小说曾被天津《小说月报》、河南的《小小说选刊》和长春《短篇小说选刊》转载;散文曾被《新华文摘》、《散文选刊》、《资料卡片》、《中学生课处阅读》、《中学生写作》、《中学语言教学辅导》等刊物转载数十篇,并连续入选中国作协创研部编选,长江文艺出版社出版的《1997年中国散文精选》,《1998年中国散文精选》以及《散文选刊》编选、漓江出版社出版的《1999年中国最佳散文选》、《2000年中国最佳散文选》、《2001年精短散文100篇》等全国性年度选本。 先后出版诗集《驶向星空》(陕西教育出版社出版,获陕西省作协第八届505文学奖最佳作品奖)、三卷本文集《李汉荣诗文选》(由北京华艺出版社出版,文集包括诗歌卷《母亲》、《想象李白》,散文卷《与天地精神往来》)。文集出版后,引起广泛的好评和反响,《人民日报》、《文艺报》、《天津日报》、天津《散文》月刊、《绿风》诗刊、《陕西日报》、《西安日报》、北京《中国经济时报》、《民声报》等报刊刊载了有关该文集的评论文章。英特网“搜狐”、“新浪”、“中华文艺”、 “作家在线”等众多大型文艺网站均选载作品和相关评论。
发表于1995年第6期《散文》月刊上的散文《山中访友》、入选经全国中小学教材审定委员会2001年审定通过,人民教育出版社出版的义务教育课程标准实验教科书初中语文课本(初一,上册),发表于2002年第1期《散文》月刊上的散文《黑夜里的文字》入选人民教育出版社、商务印务馆联合编辑出版的《中学生课外导读》。他的作品语句通顺流畅,无不散发出金子般的光芒
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这是一篇构思新奇、富有想象力、充满好奇心的散文。作者“带着满怀的好心情”,走进山林,探访山中的“朋友”,与“朋友”互诉心声,营造了一个如诗如画的世界,表达了对大自然的热爱之情。
在叙述方式上,本文独具匠心。一读题目,触发思绪的便是作者到山中去拜访一位老朋友了。但读到文章的第3自然段时,读者才恍然大悟,原来作者要访的是古桥、树林、山泉、溪流、瀑布、悬崖……是一些自然界的朋友。通篇以这样的方式叙述,使读者也进入到画面中,进入到作者的心境中,仿佛这些自然界的朋友,不但是作者的,也是我们每一位读者的,于是倍感亲切。作者根据表达的需要,还恰当地变换叙述人称,对山中的“朋友”,作者有时用第三人称叙述,有时感情强烈了又以第二人称称呼,从而使情感表达得更加充分。
本文想象丰富、新奇,有浪漫色彩。如,“我脚下长出的根须,深深扎进泥土和岩层;头发长成树冠,胳膊变成树枝,血液变成树的汁液,在年轮里旋转、流淌。”作者把自己想象为一棵树,使树与“我”融为一体。又如,“你好,陡峭的悬崖!深深的峡谷衬托着你挺拔的身躯,你高高的额头上仿佛刻满了智慧。”想象中,悬崖似乎成了一位智者。由此可见,想象使景物栩栩如生,灵气飞扬。同时,作者还采用比喻、拟人、排比等手法,使文笔生动活泼,而且,也很好地表达了对山中“朋友”的那份深厚感情。读着这篇散文,绝不会有呆板、陈腐的感觉,你会强烈地感受到那种诗一样的韵律和情怀,你会时时为作者热爱大自然的感情所打动,时时为流淌在字里行间的激情所感染。真的,如果用你的心去感受作者的心,透过语言文字,想想那充满诗意的画面,你就会进入作者所描绘的美好境界。
本文作为本组“感受自然”的第一篇课文,目的一是通过感受作者描绘的境界,体会他一路上的好心情,培养学生热爱自然、亲近自然的美好情感;二是学习作者通过比喻、拟人、排比、想象来表达情感的方法,并积累语言。
本课的重点是感受作者对山里的“朋友”那份深厚的感情,并体会作者表达情感的方法。
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校园访友

走进校门,就与微风撞了个满怀,风中含着玉兰花和木瓜的香气,早晨,好清爽。

那棵雪松,是我要拜访的第一位老朋友。啊,老松,你如一位德高望重的老人,在这门口站了几十年了吧?你像一把撑开的大伞,多少人在你底下乘凉。你直着腰,守卫着我们美丽的校园。岁月悠悠,唯有你高大挺拔。

来到四棵木瓜树下,树叶和我说着悄悄话。每一棵树都是我的知己,它们迎面送来无边的香气,一个个小木瓜你挤我碰,争着让我去摘呢!

校园中的一切,哪个不是我的好朋友?我热切地跟他们打招呼:你好!圆圆的葡萄,你捧出一串串果实,是要我品尝一下吗?你好!笔直的竹子,你是要提醒我们写作业时要坐端正吗?你好!挺拔的旗杆,你多少次把五星红旗升起,朴实而神圣的你经历了无数风风雨雨,依旧那么笔直、那么挺拔。你好!宽阔的操场,你默默无闻的为我们做贡献,多少同学在你的帮助下变得活泼、开朗。你好!高大的教学楼,你的红砖、白墙里传出朗朗的读书声,你为国家输送了多少人才?喂,淘气的麻雀,叽叽喳喳地在谈些什么呢?我猜你们津津乐道的是讨论同学们学习的认真劲。

拾起一片废纸,我感到了学校的清洁美丽,捡起一片树叶,细数有规律的叶脉,我体验到了大自然的神奇美丽。

快上课了,我轻轻的挥手,告别校园里的朋友,带着满怀的好心情、好记忆,迎来新一天的课程.
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走出门,就与满天的朝霞握了握手,碰了碰头。清晨,好清爽!心里的感觉好清爽!

不知不觉间就到了园子。蚯蚓爷爷是我要拜访的第一个朋友。无私奉献的蚯蚓爷爷,您在湿润的土壤里耕耘了多少年?不知您把多少个生命引上光明,让它们勃勃地生长。那时您是最开心的。不知您累了吗?我想您是不会累的,因为这是您无悔的选择。您让我们看到了一个乐观而不屈的灵魂。

你好,番茄弟弟!你穿着红棉袍,难道是为我的到来而穿上的盛装吗?你好,萝卜姐姐!你躲在土地中是邀我与你一起捉迷藏吗?你好,白菜大嫂!你上着绿衣,下穿白裙,是要去赴宴吗?那快点去吧!不要迟到了哦!你好呀,青蛙大哥!你瞪着双炯炯有神的眼睛,难道想捕更多的害虫吗?不必了,你的功勋已经是很了不起了,多少害虫葬身你的腹中?什么!你还要坚持下去,破自己的记录吗?好吧!不打扰你了,加油呀!你好呀!包菜大妈!您真伟大,包菜弟弟们全在您的怀抱中茁壮成长。无论是狂风暴雨,还是烈日炎炎,您都从不退却,您是多么无私呀!喂,蚂蚁弟弟!你们急急忙忙干什么呀!哦?要下雨了吗?谢谢你们的提醒,那你们快点回家吧!

我刚走到一片树阴下,便下起了雨。你好呀,雨点妹妹!你是多么可爱!哦?你是说叫我回家吗?不,没关系。我淋一下雨无碍的,你还是赶紧去滋润土地大叔吧!他都裂开了嘴。

停了。田野间传来几声蛙叫,云端掠过一群归雁。我也该回家了。我轻轻摇了摇手,带着满怀的好心情,好记忆,顺便带回了一身夕阳红。
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