Question

请帮我看看这个作文题我的写法对吗？

这是一个作文题，图片画的是一个男孩正在横穿马路。下面是我写的一个开头。
From picture　we can see the boy gets crossing obey the triffic rule on the triffic jam.
as we see , it was dangers. i hope we need to attention our child that he see car of beside before crossing road. tell him that be safed better if you can do it

中文想表达的意思：

从这张图片，我们可以看到，这个男孩不注意交通规则正在穿过马路，正如我们所看到的，它是相当危险的，我希望我们需要提醒我们的孩子，当他们在过马路的时候，应该先看看马路两边的车，告诉他这样做会更安全。

Answer 1

1.he see car of beside ....这是神马..
我觉得写 he should look around and be sure weather there is any car
2. tell him that be safed better if you can do it
tell him it is safer to do that
3.开头用 accroding the picture
4.we can see the boy gets crossing obey the triffic rule on the triffic jam.
we see the boy crossing the road without obeying the traffic rules
5. it was dangers.
it is dangerous
给你说句不好听的 不是打击你宝宝 这篇文章通篇是问题 建议有的时候别写太麻烦的句子
而且要搞清楚时态 这个很重要 不过每天练习总会有效果的

Answer 2

the picture illustrates that the boy who is crossing the road obeys the traffic rules.As we can see,it is extremly dangerous .so I wanna to appeal that the children should pay more attention to the cars beside you before croossing the streets . it will be much safer ,you know .

这个 友谊点小拽口语了 当然可以把句末的you know删掉 会正式一点的 希望可以被采纳