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2.题目：Somepeoplethinkimmigrantsshoulacceptthenewcultureastheirown.Othersbelievethatthe...
2.题目：Some people think immigrants shoul accept the new culture as their own.Others believe that they should keep their own culture.Discuss both views and give your opinion.
With the econonic globalization,more and more countries opened the door,various cooperation projects promote the communication between different lands.Immigration is no longer a tough task that is difficult for normal people,and it become much more popular among the mid-age guys.Immigration means someone has to face a new culture which is totally stange for them,so some people think that immigrants should accept the new culture as their own,but others believe that they should keep their own culture.
For the former,they believe accepting new culture enables immigrants to integrate into the local community and avoid conflicts with local residents.Everybody know that if someone wants to join a new group ,abay their rules is the basic condition,so accept a new culture as their own is significant for the immigrants.There are many examples illustrate this point,for instant,some overseas students are bullied by the local students just because the misunderstanding of their culture.Overmore,it will probably provide immigrants with more oppotunities for success if they choose to accept the new customs and beliefs.If you can accept a new culture,you would communicate better with the local,which means you would get more chances to be outstanding.
But for the latters,they suppose our own culture is just like the root of the tree,it builds our country and provides so much for our daily life.We can not give up our culture easily and accept a new one.And they think encourage immigrants to keep their own culture helps to preserve colourful culture,we can not strengthen one by destory another,various culture can keep the balance and keep the world moving on.
In my opinion,it is important for immigrants to accept the new culture,but we must know our owns clearly first and keep it in mind forever,and it is useful to combine both culture together and remember,reject the dross and assimilate the seesnce.
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With the econonic globalization,more and more countries opened the door,various cooperation projects promote the communication between different lands.Immigration is no longer a tough task that is difficult for normal people,and it become much more popular among the mid-age guys.Immigration means someone has to face a new culture which is totally stange for them,so some people think that immigrants should accept the new culture as their own,but others believe that they should keep their own culture.
For the former,they believe accepting new culture enables immigrants to integrate into the local community and avoid conflicts with local residents.Everybody know that if someone wants to join a new group ,abay their rules is the basic condition,so accept a new culture as their own is significant for the immigrants.There are many examples illustrate this point,for instant,some overseas students are bullied by the local students just because the misunderstanding of their culture.Overmore,it will probably provide immigrants with more oppotunities for success if they choose to accept the new customs and beliefs.If you can accept a new culture,you would communicate better with the local,which means you would get more chances to be outstanding.
But for the latters,they suppose our own culture is just like the root of the tree,it builds our country and provides so much for our daily life.We can not give up our culture easily and accept a new one.And they think encourage immigrants to keep their own culture helps to preserve colourful culture,we can not strengthen one by destory another,various culture can keep the balance and keep the world moving on.
In my opinion,it is important for immigrants to accept the new culture,but we must know our owns clearly first and keep it in mind forever,and it is useful to combine both culture together and remember,reject the dross and assimilate the seesnce.
这是之前写的一篇，也望高手指导。http://zhidao.baidu.com/question/338010962.html 展开
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